Topic: Don't Call Me Soldier.

Don't Call Me Soldier.

Don't call me soldier,
Just call me a man.
I am standing here
With Peace in my hands
Don't turn your children's eyes away
They too must understand.

I look out across the deserts.
I look out across the plains
I look out across the mountains
Through the mist and through the rain
I look out across the cities,
So the cities can sleep again.

I walk across the gardens
Where the groups of mothers weep,
Past the newly planted gravestones
Where the priests their vigil keep.
I walk along the tight rope,
Death has promises to keep.

I flame in the darkness
When with other men I fight,
When fear tears out men's hearts
When blood stains coat the night.
And I weep in his empty halls
With no-one else in sight.

And I'll sail home when time comes
When the men in power say.
Fit to break the rusting ship
Or plough their fields for pay
And I'll eke out my pension
When this red hair turns to gray

Or I'll lie upon these barren hills,
Or fall slowly through the sea,
Breathless in the shifting stillness,
Lonely as a tomb can be,
Or the chain weights on my shoulders
Will put an end to me.

"Don't play what's there, play what's not there." Miles Davis

Re: Don't Call Me Soldier.

this poem is maybe one of the best and deepest meaningful poems i have read on here.
The poem is telling it from a soldiers point of view as being a peace keeper, someone sent to help a country but has no choice but to fight for peace. telling that people must die to obtain the peace and they only can stop when the power that be tell them they can.

this is superbly written
very well done indeed.


Cheers

Ken

ye get some that are cut out for the job and others just get by from pretending

Re: Don't Call Me Soldier.

Thanks, Ken.

I appreciate the kind words.

I'm not happy with one of the verses where I've rhymed keep and keep. I'm thinking about changing it.

The verse goes

I walk across the gardens
Where the groups of mothers weep,
Past the newly planted gravestones
Where the priests their vigil keep.
I walk along the tight rope,
Death has promises to keep.

And I'm thinking of changing it to

I walk across the gardens
Where the groups of mothers weep,
Past the newly planted gravestones
Where the priests their prophets seek.
I walk along the tight rope,
Death has promises to keep.

"Don't play what's there, play what's not there." Miles Davis

Re: Don't Call Me Soldier.

eh, lol, i like both

ye get some that are cut out for the job and others just get by from pretending

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Very well done.

Everything is bad including me
But being bad is good policy
Reverend Horton Heat

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Wow, Nice write StranSongs. This really packs a lot of thought into it. I like your re-write. smile

Good Work on this.

Kenny

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Re: Don't Call Me Soldier.

Thanks everyone. I now have music for it and will record when I get the chance.

"Don't play what's there, play what's not there." Miles Davis

Re: Don't Call Me Soldier.

This is amazing! I love it...

It reminds me of a Poem I read as a child, although it is nothing like it, it affected me equally... I think it was called 'What the Bullet sang' I'm gonna have to look it up now!   Thankyou for sharing that... It was sooo good... It was like you were there!!xx

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I found it! am I allowed to post a link to it?

Re: Don't Call Me Soldier.

Hi Alan
Great powerful poem excellent
Well done


Tine
A Link to the poem would be ok if the site is non commercial.
ark

Re: Don't Call Me Soldier.

Tine,

I'd love to see it.

Ark.

Thanks for the fine words.

"Don't play what's there, play what's not there." Miles Davis

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http://www.cs.rice.edu/~ssiyer/minstrel … /1033.html

That is the link... I don't think it is a comercial site although I'm not sure!? If it is you can remove it!xx