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If you read all this, thank you. Kinda long and depressing.
I didnt want you
So you ran away
And now that your leaving
I want you to stay
I'm sorry I lied
Please let me in
My promise to you
is it wont happen again
Your all that I needed
Wont hurt you no more
Wont call you a bitch
Wont call you a whore
You've heard it before
But I'll get it this time
And walk with a reason
A rhythm, a rhyme.
I didnt want you
So you ran and hid
And now I am left
with all that I did.
Takes to much time
to get it all back
Wish that you'd give me
Just one more chance
As a person I've grown
As a lover I have not
I dont expect you
to give it a shot
I write theses lame words
Thinking of you
Lie to myself
How I have grew
It all seems the same
But seems strangely different
Now Im alone
Not out to win it.
We tried to play house
Without building a home
I know it's my fault
It's my burden alone
Cant help but be bitter
for all that came next
Get over myself
and repay this debt
That I owe to you
To get it all right
But all thats inside me
just wants to fight.
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I like your poem, honesty from within.
"There was a light at the end of the tunnel, but it turned out to be a train"
John Cambelljohn.
write more... badeye 
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yp3nee78adk
Last edited by badeye (2011-01-13 20:38:11)
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Me too Selso. He is a local from our island, here a nova scotian that i like to try {try} to copy.
it's a lot of fun..
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CTHNH-sluEI
badeye
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i may have hijacked your thread, sorry bout that, but i remember you asked about slide or lap playing. its a neat way to learn, the guitar. your poem/song could be played slide style for sure.
badeye,,,,take care
Last edited by badeye (2011-01-13 23:04:18)
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i get the impression that this would make a great country song.
it's not really long, if you put two lines into one and doubled up the verses it would only be half as long on the page.
if this is a true story, stop kicking your self and learn the lesson for next time.
nice write, i'll say it again, make a good song
phill
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I liked your poem. It had a good rythm and ryhme and message.
Nice Job
Flybye
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Hi Selso, nice poem, sad story, the makings of a touching song.
best line:
"We tried to play house
Without building a home"
good stuff...keep writing! -T
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Man, that is one bootiful poem.
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