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one of a handful of songs I have written. thought I would post one  and see what comments I get on it.

[Cm7] blue moon rising[G] over the pines
[Cm7] shining softly [G] like a mellow wine
[Cm7] and in the shadows [G]she comes to me
[Cm7] no place in this world[G] id rather be

chorus
[Em]blue moon sh[C]ine your light on m[G]e
[Em] in your l[C]ight our love will b[G]e
[D] don't let the m[C]orning  in to s[g]oon
[D] shine all n[C]ight for me blue m[G]oon

I don't want this night to ever end
ill always remember where our love began
under neath that moon she held me tight
never want to see the morning light

chorus

and when the morning comes
as it always will
the flame may falter but I love you still
and when some day that blue moon returns
underneath that rare moon light
our flame will burn

chorus

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Re: first posting

Welcome, Mojo01, nice song. For me, when you finish the song with the chorus I would add a tag using the last 2 lines of the chorus as the song fades out, slowly. Just my 2 cents.


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Re: first posting

NELA wrote:

I would add a tag using the last 2 lines of the chorus as the song fades out, slowly. Just my 2 cents.


Nela

Maybe a finger picking for those 2 lines with a a slow, soft strum on the G to close the song out.

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I like it Mojo. Going to try it out when I get home. Reminds me of some of JJ Cale's work.

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Re: first posting

hi mojo, welcome to chordie.

nice song. i found the only way i could get the chords to fit was as a waltz. i particularly like the way you go to Em for the chorus, i guess that would put the song into the key of G? the Cminor7th threw me at the start.

try and get your head around chopro to make it "all purdy like" it's a bit of a fiddle to start but when you get into it, it will come naturally.

very nice, keep em coming

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thanks for the input I guess I need to record it to give an idea of how I think it should sound

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just note with my lack of musical knowledge I made a mistake transcribing .  that Cm7 should read a Cmaj7. different sound and a whole lot easier chord to form.

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https://soundcloud.com/mojo01/blue-moon

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