1 (edited by beestie 2015-08-31 20:03:03)

Topic: The Sleaze

Another slightly dodgy song by me. You can tell my misspent youth was the 70's to 80's.
https://soundcloud.com/sak-26/the-sleazemp3



The Sleaze
[C]Of course I’ll respect you in the morning he said
[F]As he sat her down on his waterbed
[C]With satin sheets coloured green
[G]She was the prettiest girl he had ever seen
[C]Just relax and have a wine
[G]There’s no hurry we’ll just take our time
[F]That little black dress that she always wore,
[C]looked so much better as it dropped to the floor


[C]She said I have never done this before
[G]As he quietly lock the bedroom door
[F]No need to worry, he gave her a kiss
[C]I am also new to this


[C] And so it went on all though the night
[F] She didn’t really put up much of a fight
[C] All next week he never did call
[G] It’s like nothing had ever happened at all
[C] But something inside her had started to grow
[F] And after five months, was beginning to show
[G] It might not be mine he said with dismay
[C] When he found she was in the family way

[C]She said that’s what it says in the test
[G]I’m keeping the baby, it’s all for the best
[F]And from now on he will have to pay
[G]for what he did on that fateful day.
[F]And now together they are always stuck
[C]All because of a five minute kiss.

Re: The Sleaze

Yeah...I'll comment.
The human hormonal urges and the consequences.

I admire your ability to put words down in such a way..real life drama.

I like it better as a poem rather than a song as suggested.
Just my opinion.

Don't stop writing songs...I wish I could.

Thanks Chordie for the years of music and advise.

3 (edited by beestie 2015-09-01 03:27:57)

Re: The Sleaze

I have redone this in the key of A, slowed it down and concentrated more on the words. https://soundcloud.com/sak-26/the-sleaze-in-amp3 so now it is more of a poem set to music. It does make it easier to hear what I am saying.
I would be interested in your opinions.

Re: The Sleaze

Slowing it down helped, in my opinion.

I think the jest of the song is something we can all relate to...we are all human...I hope so anyhow.

I look forward to your next song.

Thanks Chordie for the years of music and advise.

Re: The Sleaze

oh boy, one night stands. in all honesty, i never liked them, haven't listened yet but i will when i've got a minute. you've strung the words together like a pro, and of course this is all too familiar subject to us older folks.
i love the last line where you've changed the obvious rhyme to "kiss". your humour is not lost on me my friend. keep em coming.

phill

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

Re: The Sleaze

hi beestie, just had a listen and it's good. IMHO a little faster with a stronger rhythm, i played it on the guitar and enjoyed and had a laugh too.

well done.

phill

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.