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This is the first song I've tried writing I hope you like it. Its for acoustic, ive found chords for it and it is pretty basic, it has G, Em, C, and D. In a few weeks I plan to record the song and put it on itunes, hopefully I might even make a video, who knows. So without further ado here is my first song: Loving Somebody.
Verse 1/Intro:
How can you tell me “I love you"
When its my heart you're willing to tear
How can you say that “this is true"
When you seem like you don't give a care
What am I supposed to do
You've left this pain for me to bare
Chorus:
This isn't a fairytale
No one will save me
No one has traveled this trail
Come rescue me, where could you be?
Loving Somebody?
Verse 2:
I remember that night, going up to my bed
Our love, I thought could never die
But now its your picture I want to shred
How could you tell me this lie
For once our meeting I dread
This is our final good-bye
Chorus:
This isn't a fairytale
No one will save me
No one has traveled this trail
Come rescue me, where could you be
Loving Somebody
Bridge:
Somebody come and tell me its all right
Somebody find me, show me the way
Into your loving arms that will hold me all night
Will I find you today
Please save me from this fright
Loving Somebody
Verse 3:
Its gonna be okay, look into my eyes
I can let him go, this I hope you know
I didn't have to try, he always made me cry
Finally in your arms, you will never let me go
When I look in your eyes, I don't ask why
Outro:
Because, this is a fairytale
Someone saved me
You've traveled my trail
You've rescued me, this was meant to be
I've found my Loving Somebody
Well, what do you guys think? I will put a link or something when i can
Last edited by blackwolf27 (2011-05-12 17:56:05)
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Some good lyrics blackwolf,I hope some of the good songwriters here will come along and help you with some chords.Welcome too the forum.
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Nice lyrics and I have an idea for a tune, but first I notice that the third verse seems to be short a line?
If you can correct that I will try and whack something up for you to use or discard as you see fit. My singing is not the best but I will record what I end up with and post it for you and anyone else who is interested to download. With your permission I will also need to change the gender of the lyrics.
Nice work keep it up.
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alright thats aweome i would love that and idk how i would b able to fix the third verse but if u can think of a way let me know thanks for your help
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hi blackwolf27welcome to chordie,these are brilliant lyrics,i hope you get it sorted soon and a recording,well done.....stay cool
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I have a had a more indepth look at the lyrics and I am a little puzzled, perhaps I am interpreting them wrong or perhaps they have been written incorrectly. My query is.....
In the first few verses you are talking directly to a person eg: "How can YOU tell me “I love you""
then later in verse 3 you appear to be talking to somebody else about the person you origonally began talking to?
eg: " I can let HIM go, this I hope you know"
Can you clarify this please as it presents a lyrical problem as I currently interpretet it. I cant recall ever seeing a song where the subject of the lyrics changes as the song progresses, it just feels wrong.
Thanks.
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I think I finally have my head around the interpretation, and have re-written the final verse for you so that it fits with the same verse structure of the previous 2 verses. See if you like this suggestion:
Its gonna be okay, look into my eyes
I can let him go, I hope you know
that he always made me cry
but in your arms my love will grow
I dont ask you why
I just let the feeling flow
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Hi blackwolf27
As this is just lyrics without a chord a structure as yet I have moved the post to poems section.
The "sticky at the top of the Songwriting section gives the reasons as to why this was done.
Nice set of lyrics has potential.
Arkady (Mod)
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I have the some problem when i write a song. I can't think of a good tune to put to it. It's annoying! 
Last edited by steelstrings (2011-05-12 13:48:48)
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hi blackwolf, welcome to poems.
i think i've worked out the problem, you've mixed up the bridge and 3rd verse. if you play what you've marked as "bridge" as verse 3 it works. verse 3 then becomes the bridge (hope you've got a tune for it?)
i made my own rhythm and chords to play it, which will most likely differ immensly from what you've written.
nice write, looking forwrd to hearing the finnished song. let us know when you post it
phill
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yes man your effort is too good. I really like your effort carry on.
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Sorry it has taken so long to upload this ( I forgot I had recorded it lol )
Anyway the song can be found at http://songsprouts.com/profile.php?id=1243
You will notice that when I recorded it I made the changes that I had suggested to get the lyrics to fit correctly and I also made a mistake with the vocals by not singing the outro differently to the chorus. If you want the chord structure let me know and I will post them. Also I would like to include your name on the credits and the copyright for the song so please pm me with your name and I will include your name on the copyright with APPRA. Lovely lryrics I hope you enjoy my interpretation of them.
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@ seriousfun thanks i have put a tune to it but i will still listen to it but yeah be sure to copyright on it with my name cus i have a music video for it plus im using it in my band
HERE IS THE VIDEO: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KSE5OlLlyBc
Last edited by blackwolf27 (2011-09-16 14:51:29)
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deleted by mod....if you want blue pils, go see your doctor
Last edited by janejam (2012-07-28 13:18:58)
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I must read and listen poem of Abbey and Henry, they are my favorite poem author these person are my loving persons. I love with them and also love with their poem…
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