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#1 2011-09-28 02:29:58

tommydone
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When I see you smile
There is nothing wrong
When I hear you laugh
My heart sings a song
Love was just a word
... Until you came along
There were days when I couldn't see the forest through the trees
And I thank God baby I'm down on my knees
For sending me an angel
When I had lost my way
Perfect just like a snowflake
That never could be stained
When I hold your hand
You hold onto my heart
I'm gonna love you forever
I knew this from the start
Two hearts become one
And never shall they part

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#2 2011-10-04 16:46:09

Phill Williams
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Re: untitled #2

nice write tommydone. it feels like your speaking to someone in particular?

will this get put to music?

phill


There are two "L's" in Phill

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#3 2011-10-04 20:27:41

tommydone
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Re: untitled #2

yes, speaking to my girlfriend Denise. I stink at song writing. I can sing and play a little but when it comes to writing my own music I am lacking. I'll give it a try though

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#4 2012-02-22 20:51:18

JJ ember
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Registered: 2011-04-06
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Re: untitled #2

I like this poem. Very sweet.


Without music life would be a journey through a desert.

I Cor 14:15

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#5 2012-02-27 04:59:00

T-Rex
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Re: untitled #2

I like this: simple, direct, to the point, and sweet - what some of the best songs are made of.  has one other quality: 'connectability'... reminds me of someone special.  keep writing! ~T

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