• Registered: 2007-05-11
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Topic: Outside Looking In

This is a new forum to me (it's been a while since I've posted...long story). A good idea though because lots of great ideas die in the scribble stages so this is a good place for them to be kept.

here's one I've just about finished. I may have posted a version some time ago but I'm not sure. If so, sorry about that.

Outside Looking In

I’m on the outside looking in.
I’ve been watching the wind.
I’ve been down on the beaches.
I’ll go there again.
In wondrous amazement I look to the sky,
At the stars up above me,
Questioning ‘why’?

What do you believe in?
I believe in love.
What do you believe in?
I believe in love.
But do you believe in Heaven Above?
I believe in love.

I’m on the outside looking in.
I’ve been talking to friends.
Not one here among us,
Knows where I’ve been.
In my mind in the morning, and the deep, darkest night.
Drinking in creation,
Until the sweet By and By.

What do you believe in?
I believe in love.
What do you believe in?
I believe in love.
But do you believe in Heaven Above?
I believe in love.

I’m on the outside looking in.
I must be myself.
No good to be someone,
For somebody else.
I’ll try in my lifetime to be true and kind.
Walking through the forest,
Hopeful and blind.

What do you believe in?
I believe in love.
What do you believe in?
I believe in love.
But do you believe in Heaven Above?
I believe in love.

  • From: Georgia
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Re: Outside Looking In

Great poem Snowden. It really inspires me to get back to penning some of my own. smile

  • From: A black hole in deep space
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Re: Outside Looking In

I think these are wonderful words Snowden I like the reference to having your own thoughts on what is or is not, very nice smile

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4 Reply by aabb (edited by aabb 2009-03-24 17:32:21)

  • aabb
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Re: Outside Looking In

snowden      you've said so much with so few words, nicely done  smile

Ron
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Re: Outside Looking In

Hi Snowden,

yes this is the place to post this most wonderful work, although this forum is called poems, you can also put in work in progress, if you want to turn your poem into a song. Or if a member gets inspired by your words, then you may be asked if they can put it to music, or you may ask if someone can put music to it!
You can also post questions.

We try to help, encourage and enjoy each others thoughts, this is your site.

The images you invoke are quite lovely, I could imagine and visualise as I was reading.

Well done and thanks for sharing

Phill

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  • Registered: 2007-05-11
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Re: Outside Looking In

Thank you all for your kind comments! I have got some music worked out for this and some minor lyric changes. I'll get that posted soon.

s.

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Re: Outside Looking In

looking forward to it !

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  • Registered: 2007-04-03
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Re: Outside Looking In

I love this poem/ Song.

I’m on the outside looking in.
I must be myself.
No good to be someone,
For somebody else.
I’ll try in my lifetime to be true and kind.
Walking through the forest,
Hopeful and blind".


Yes ! i agree its scary to stand outside yourself and reflect.

This piece is so beautifully crafted Snowden300.

Thank You.

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !
  • Registered: 2007-05-11
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Re: Outside Looking In

thanks old Doll,

you've commented on my stuff in the past as well. I appreciate that. Actually in performing this piece I have the lyrics changed a bit...this verse runs like this now:

"...I cannot be someone,
for somebody else.
I'll try in my lifetime to be true and to be kind.
and I'll walk through the forest,
Full of hope and be so blind."

there's changes in the first verses also but like Zep sez ...the song remains the same.

s.