Thank you Beamer - Thats a good shorter version

Thank you.  I think a song should not be too wordy, its a hard one when its a personal story, but I think it holds attention better.

At daybreak she snuck out of that West Texas bedroom,

careful not to wake his dog. She made herself the last cup of coffee,

Creeping out to her rusty Dodge, holding on to her prayer, the old engine took three

Tries, and spinning her tires, she took off to nowhere.

The past life was over and a new one had begun.

So she drove into the Sun.

chorus
Driving towards the sun, the future ain’t too clear.

You just know what your leaving

And you hope God will help you steer.

You got to grab that wheel, and hold on tight.

Lines passing down the highway,

it Just Feels Right.

When the time has come….to drive into the Sun.

The war took his leg, and another man his wife.

He didn’t know what he had left, he didn’t see a reason for life.

But he met a girl in College and she helped him over

The pain and then he realized that his time wasn’t done….

You gotta grab that wheel   and hold on tight.

As he held her hand,  it Just Felt Right.

and the time had come….to drive into the Sun.

yes they are driving ,,, into ,,, the sun.

Thank you. If you have suggested changes, go ahead and post them here.  The song has not been recorded, and is just a draft at this point, so there are no bad suggestions.

I totally missed this, now I gotta find the file I saved the changes too! but I will put it up.

Time is the defining thing right now, I'll get back tonight ASAP

Needs a tweak. 

Maybe something like

Her tires spun,  throwing gravel , in a hurry to get anywhere
Or something like that     
I don’t know.  Just a suggestion
It truly is a great song
Phil - send me a copy when it’s done!

Jim

[C] At daybreak she snuck out of that [Em] West Texas bedroom,
[Am] careful not to wake  man or [C] dog.
[Em] She sipped his last cup of [Am] coffee,
then she [F] crept out to her old rusty [G] Dodge.
[Am] When that old engine started on the [F] third prayer,
[Fm] she spun the tiresout of that [G] gravel nowhere.
[C] An old life was over and [Em] new one had begun..
and she [F] drove [G] into the [C] Sun.

Thanks I think you have really captured what that song is all about - with shared experience (driving into the sun) that is relatable.  I would do it as a slow country song but you are right that maybe different chords in the chorus will improve it. To be honest, I choose those chords in a couple minutes as a placeholder for possible better chords.  I am humbled by your comments.

It appears there are two stories here? Both well written and they draw the reader in.

I quite agree!!!

The xception being I'm seeing three scenes, not two

The end of each scene is left unknown, except that they are starting anew - that is fabulous.    Am sure that everyone of us has a different ending for each

This is one of those songs (as a fellow songwriter ) that you say " damn, I wish I had written that !"

I can't wait to hear it in finished form

Jim

I will try playing it later as it's early morning. I notice though, you use the same chord progression in verse and chorus? So how do you picture the song? A waltz time or 4/4? Fast or slow? A rough recording would help. I find the writing impeccable.