Guitar chord forum - chordie — Rainbow

Re: Rainbow

null@example.com (Phill Williams) — Sat, 05 Jul 2008 11:53:45 +0000

hi linus,

maybe if you substituted
" you opened my eyes
and i realised..."
for;
"you gave me sight, the quest begins..."

it seems to go with the next line about the mystery part, please use it if it fits with your vision of the song [or if you think it's good enough]

hope i helped

phill

Re: Rainbow

null@example.com (Roger Guppy) — Wed, 02 Jul 2008 21:31:57 +0000

Hi Linus,

I liked your song, well what I could play of it. I have a problem with songs that I do not know and that is I cannot play and sing when the chords are not with the lyrics so I could only part of yours but I did enjoy it. Thank you.

Roger

Re: Rainbow

null@example.com (Old Doll) — Tue, 01 Jul 2008 21:06:40 +0000

This to me has a lovely flow to it. I do love the lyrics.

Maybe " Made my eyes see" Just a suggestion!

Very well done,

Old Doll.

Re: Rainbow

null@example.com (SouthPaw41L) — Tue, 01 Jul 2008 18:13:10 +0000

Sometimes 'cliche' works. It's the familiarity of everyday language that helps the reader/listener relate. I think you've done a real nice job with this song. I wouldn't change a thing.

Peace and Guitars,
SouthPaw41L

Re: Rainbow

null@example.com (daddycool) — Tue, 01 Jul 2008 16:46:40 +0000

hi linusguitar a few punctuation marks and i think its a great song.....stay cool

Re: Rainbow

null@example.com (KAP54) — Tue, 01 Jul 2008 15:22:06 +0000

Hi Linusguitar.Your song has a very nice flow to it and plays well.As for critiquing, all I see is to maybe place your words in more of a sentence form.Use commas where needed as it helps in the visualization and flow of the song.Other than that....Well done Sir.

Keep on Pluckin
KAP54

Rainbow

null@example.com (Linusguitar) — Tue, 01 Jul 2008 13:29:36 +0000

Am G
Stumbling through
C
the mess I've made
G
hidden beneath
Am G
a makeshift charade
Am G
And just how much
C
can this heart take
G
Just how much
Am
Before I break

Chorus:
Am G
So here I am
Am
bloodstained hands
G
Nothing to show
Am
nowhere to go
G
I can see your face
Am
but still not clear
G
I can't seem to focus
Am
through my fears

My tears streaming down
Colour the ground
A strange shade of rainbow
the thought of free
somehow scares me
forgotten familiarity yeah

CHORUS

Am
You reached for me
G
you took me in
Am
You opened my eyes
C
and I realized
Am G
the answer to the mystery
F
was standing there
G
in front of me Yeah

Guitar solo, than
this to the tune of the chorus

I can feel you love closing in
I can feel your blood wash my sin
I can feel the awesome power flow
I can feel and I can know

Am
You reached for me
G
you took me in
Am
You opened my eyes
C
and I realized
Am G
the answer to the mystery
F
Had finally come
G
I was free

Any comments, critique, anything welcome. The one part I don't really like is the " Opened my eyes, and I realized" . it's kind of really cliche, if anybody has any other ideas for that part they are welcome to make them known.