1 (edited by TIGLJK 2018-05-27 12:08:36)

Topic: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

OK - so Dirty Ed put up a post entitled - Some girls are hard to impress.
As soon as I read the title of that post I said to myself......" hmmm that's a darn good title for a song "
As it turned out other's agreed with me... but alas... it was only a very funny
video of a male bird trying to impress a female to no avail.

So anyways.... that title has been sitting on my mind ever since... and this morning when I woke up I was just strumming my guitar when this line popped into my head... and it fit the chords I was playing.  One thing led to another and before you know it... I wrote this song.  Hope you like it.

Some Girls Are Hard To Impress Jim Kenyon


[G]Everything about her makes me feel just right


[Cmaj7]got the sweetest smile and the prettiest eyes


[G]I’d love to be with her every night


she’s[D] good at everything she [Cmaj7] does, and barely even[G] tries




.




Chorus


[Cmaj7] yeah I buy her everything that I can afford


[G] make all the right moves, n’ say the right words


[Cmaj7] been trying real hard to do my best


But ya [D] know some girls are [Cmaj7]hard to im[G]press




.




[G]I love the way she moves, she’s always at ease


[Cmaj7] cooler than any girl that I’ve ever seen


[G] like a ray of sunshine or cool summer breeze


she’s [D]so hard to hold onto[Cmaj7], if you know what I [G]mean.




.


Chorus


[Cmaj7] yeah I buy her everything that I can afford



[G] make all the right moves, n’ say the right words


[Cmaj7] been trying real hard to do my best


But ya [D] know some girls are [Cmaj7]hard to im[G]press


.




[G] Well, you never know what she’s gonna do


[Cmaj7] Her laughter charms the air with every sound


[G] She’s funny, she’s sexy, and occasionally wild


She [d]makes everything [Cmaj7]better when she’s a[G]round




.


Chorus


[Cmaj7] yeah I buy her everything that I can afford


[G] make all the right moves, n’ say the right words


[Cmaj7] been trying real hard to do my best


But ya [D] know some girls are [Cmaj7]hard to im[G]press


.




don't ya[D]know some girls are [Cmaj7]hard to im[G]press


don't ya[D]know some girls are [Cmaj7]hard to im[G]press


yeah [D] some girls are [Cmaj7]hard to im[G]press



Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

"Use the talents you possess, for the woods would be very silent if no birds sang except only the the best." - Henry Van Dyke

Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

hi Jim.  yeah, i had the same idea, that title really works and i thought i'd like to immortalise it in song too! i haven't quite finished it yet, and i might not having read yours, which is great as usual. you got the tag line worked nicely in, which i'm failing at, at the moment. knowing you there's a recording coming soon?

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Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

TIGLJK wrote:

OK - so Dirty Ed put up a post entitled - Some girls are hard to impress.
As soon as I read the title of that post I said to myself......" hmmm that's a darn good title for a song "
As it turned out other's agreed with me... but alas... it was only a very funny
video of a male bird trying to impress a female to no avail.

So anyways.... that title has been sitting on my mind ever since... and this morning when I woke up I was just strumming my guitar when this line popped into my head... and it fit the chords I was playing.  One thing led to another and before you know it... I wrote this song.  Hope you like it.

I just don't know how you guys do that.

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[b]Today Is Only Yesterdays Tomorrow[/b]

Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

Phill

I guess great minds think alike.
I put my crappy version on soundcloud........ I'll put it under a different post.
I am 100% positive you're version will be great.
or put'em together and make a hybrid. 
Love to hear you play it if you have the inkling sometime.

JIm

Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

"Use the talents you possess, for the woods would be very silent if no birds sang except only the the best." - Henry Van Dyke

Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

UJB

Thanks ! 

Writing  just seems easy sometimes.. if it becomes hard I just stop because I know it's forced and likely will be crappy.
I sure wish I could play and sing though - it would make it so much more enjoyable.

JIm

Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

"Use the talents you possess, for the woods would be very silent if no birds sang except only the the best." - Henry Van Dyke

Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

Awesome work, TIG ...  and I listened to your SoundCloud version also. You can stop apologizing for your self-perceived lack of talent, because I for one think your voice and playing are perfectly suited for a song like this. Now we need some clever person to put your song as a backdrop to the Cockatiel video ... it'll go viral, for sure!

7 (edited by Strummerboy Bill 2018-05-27 00:02:02)

Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

Hey Jim - can I make a few suggestions.

I'm pretending you're talking to me personally and telling me about this girl, who has really impressed  you, correct? The girl of your dreams?

To me your words sound like you want me to know how you feel, but are "stumbling" a bit. That's okay - nothing wrong with being a little unsure of one's self. (The guy in the song, I mean - not you personally) smile

(we're delving into the guy's personality, can you tell? smile )



In the first verse, would you consider changing the word best (smile) to sweetest smile? It just sounds like it needs another syllable.

Also, how about changing the phrasing to "She does everything well and barely has to try"?

The reason I'm making that suggestion is because the way you have it written, it's a "negative". Sound it out and you'll see what I mean: Coach To Player who missed a field goal: "You barely even tried, Craig!" So what we want to do is keep things "positive" with this girl (whom I don't like, by the way smile ) and convey to me how easily she handles her "challenges".
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My suggested chorus. Hopefully this will work with your chord changes.

CHORUS

I buy her everything I can afford
Make all the right moves, use all the right words
Been tryin' hard to do my best
But ya know some girls are hard to impress.

(I tried to rewrite your chorus without changing what you're "saying")
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I need to break away, but will continue with my "suggestions" (or am I nit-picking?)

We need to help this poor guy find a lady worth his attention before he goes broke (or nuts)

. LOL!

Your Friend

Bill

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8 (edited by TIGLJK 2018-05-27 12:10:55)

Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

Bill
Thanks for the tips and advice!

http://i1172.photobucket.com/albums/r566/JK072652/check%20mark_zpso6trmerm.png changed to sweetest -
http://i1172.photobucket.com/albums/r566/JK072652/check%20mark_zpso6trmerm.png    changed chorus to include   "ya know"

another change I made was to the 3rd verse -
I switched in [G] She’s funny, she’s sexy, and occasionally wild
to replace
She's funny, she's wild, and sexy to

I left the "barely even tries" however because I like the way it sounds even if it is improper English, smile   and maybe this guy does have a little negative feeling towards her since everything he does gets him nowhere-  think of how that poor cockatiel was feeling ! yikes and yikes



TF
Hopefully some will make a cover of it ,  I think it would be a riot to merge that video with this song.


one last thing... sine Gibson is close to going under I figured I better hold onto my USA Gibson a while!
http://i1172.photobucket.com/albums/r566/JK072652/Gibson/image3_zpslgjmiylo.jpg


Thanks again

Jim

Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

"Use the talents you possess, for the woods would be very silent if no birds sang except only the the best." - Henry Van Dyke

9 (edited by Strummerboy Bill 2018-05-27 22:18:07)

Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

FURTHER  SUGGESTIONS For JIM'S SONG

Your 3rd Verse

I don't wanna mess with this one - rhyme-wise. You did a good job continuing your "narrative" about this girl, but take a look  and think about the "safety words" you can choose to use or pass up., the word "but" being one. Use it or don't - up to you.

Here's what I mean: "But" like a ray of sunshine or "a" cool summer breeze. "But" and "a" being your safety words. This would also make the word "so" in the next line superfluous

I'm afraid I'm not making sense. It's getting tougher to do so these days, so ask me to clarify and I will gladly  do so. smile

To conclude, let's take the song  as a story and  take a closer look at the two people involved. It's not always about the rhymes or chords, right?

1. The lady in your story has a huge problem. With one hand she's beckoning - now having become accustomed to getting those gifts he himself has admitted are barely afforded.
With the other hand she's pushing him away, but still holding that "carrot on a stick" - her. I didn't like her from the start of your story. She's got her "Sugar Daddy" in this guy, and he's probably not the only one.

2. Our "story-teller" is letting us know (not in so many words) that he's in love with her and wants to be with her under just about any circumstances. He needs help. and so does she, because I see her as a danger.

3. I'm not asking you to change anything except what I have already suggested, and that's mostly "grammar". Anything else would be censorship, no matter how were my intentions, and I don't like censorship.

4. Here on Chordie we don't discuss the psychology or philosophy of a song very often, but with these lyrics (and you're a master lyricist) you've made me not like this song and in consideration of that, I have to conclude that this isn't one of your better works.

It's probably me. At 68, I'm having problems with my thought processes. If it's not just me, then I'd like to share some further discussion (s) about this song.

On the other hand, my brother, you've succeeded in reaching one goal: You "involved" me in that tune. If I were present I'd kick that guy's butt and get him out of there so fast he'd leave skid marks.

We still friends, Jim? smile

Bill

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Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

Bill
No worries !
I'm not changing anything else, because it makes sense to me as it is,,, and I like it.
It's just a fun song - about a girl that is amazing and a guy that is head over heels for her.
(Did you watch the cockatiel? smile  )      Which was how this thing got started !
The guy is just making the point, that when you have a girl like that- it takes a lot to impress her.

You are way over thinking this.  If it makes it any easier - just picture that male cockatiel singing to that female on the perch smile !!
Take care Bill

Jim

Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

"Use the talents you possess, for the woods would be very silent if no birds sang except only the the best." - Henry Van Dyke

Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

Ah, okay. I have made it a habit notto look and listen until I've kicked the whole thing around in my head. I think that this time I was wrong to do that  and maybe I need to do it the other way around. smile

Wen I graded papers,  I always "experienced" the poem's or essays' purpose first, then came all of the other stuff. I can see that this won't work for me here.

I also came to the realization that I am having my own difficulties in sentence construction and before I know it, I have written a page and a half struggling to stay on point. I think that from here on out, we all consider the fact that "Ol' Bill's getting more than a little "milky in the  filbert" these days, and either ignore/delete my posts or at least report them. The LAST thing I want to do is cause hurt feelings within my family. So Mea Culpa, Jim and write on, my brother. smile I will now go and  listen and watch your video,

Thanks for  understanding, Jim

Bill

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Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

Nothing on St. Cloud yet  I'll check on it a bit later, smile

Bill

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Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

Mr Lyric man writes another successful song smile enjoyed it Jim, well done you smile

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Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

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Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

I just don't know how you guys do that.

"Lennon/McCartney".

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Re: Some Girls Are Hard to Impress - I had to do this ! :)

Strummerboy Bill wrote:

I just don't know how you guys do that.

"Lennon/McCartney".

Bill, sometimes it's not so much a talent as a curse. scrabbling around looking for a pen and some paper cos you've heard or thought up a line that sounds like it could be a great hook. every time you pick-up a guitar you're searching for "new" chord sequences. and worse is yet to come....writing a whole song down, having to leave it for whatever reason and when you get back to it the whole thing has gone but for the words that don't fit any other rhythm or tune.  shoot me now!

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