4,751

(9 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi highwayman61,

i can only add to what everyone else has said, good song in fact it's a very strong lyric and well written. armageddon raises it's ugly head once more.

nice to see that we can spread the themes from not just love songs to protest and anti war.

lets write a song about the greedy bankers who continue to force up prices on fuel, food and everything we need to buy, and then force down the price on things we need to sell to buy them.

sorry highwayman,  just a little rant there, the song does the biz, keep up the good work

phill

4,752

(6 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hello mr mcready, and welcome to chordie, you get snow at christmas?  nice song with good lyrics and measure, have you been writing long?

i tend to sing songs like "white christmas" on hot summer days and "summer holiday" at christmas just to wind people up, and it works

keep the faith

phill

4,753

(11 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi roger,

such a sad song, unrequited love i think it's called, and it's usually the woman who get's the poo end of the stick [trying to be polite]
nice song, very heartfelt and emotional, nice picture too, is that the present love interest or who the song is about?
hope your move wasn't too stressful, if you'd asked i would have come out to help...honest [lol]

keep em coming

phill

4,754

(9 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi jeff,
another good-un. sorry but we brits seem to be under the misconception that you yanks are as the saying goes;" over paid, over sexed and over here" well it seems one was not quite right anyway.

great song and as with all the others it brought back some memories of harder times, like when i was about 5 years old [1956] we still had sugar rationing, and seeing my aunty megan pour her tea into the sugar bowl to clean up the very last bits that were in it. having to bathe with my older sister in an old tin bath in front of the fire, going into other peoples gardens to steal apples, gooseberries or even runner beans, cos we were so hungry. i could go on but everyone has their own memory of those [happier?] times.

thanks for the reminder

phill

4,755

(8 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi all and thanks for the great replies, as far as recording is concerned, i've got a bit of a back-log, but this is top of the list.
thanks roger, what kind of brackets should i put on for chorus? bear in mind i've only just worked out how to do chopro

and russel, if you knew the young couple the song refers to... especially the girl who goes completely ballistic, the guy had to call the police last week because she attacked him with a kitchen knife! he's so scared of her he wont press charges cos her family are just as crazy.

thanks again to all

phill

4,756

(7 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi again,

as far as recording is concerned; i do mine on a digital recorder then down load onto an MP3 player then onto the computer then to chordie, sounds complicated, it cant be cos i can do it!

roger, i noticed suggested just getting a cheap mike and plugging in directly to you computer, as long as you've got a reasonably new machine you should have no problems as it eats up your ram, then your machine will freeze up, 2 gigs should be well good enough. dont over record and make sure you get a good balance with guitar and voice. then you will need to join myspace to upload your songs so we can all benefit from your talent. if you get stuck, just ask theres always plenty of help and advice here.
hope this is useful

phill

4,757

(8 replies, posted in Songwriting)

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4,758

(7 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi sf7.

nice long song ,i wonder how it goes?
it's a similar theme to "once i had a secret love" as in you dont want anyone to know about your romance!
one question; do you play the chords as a kind of riff? you know play them one after the other with each vocal line over the top? or is there a beat and the chords shape the melody line? oops thats two isnt it?
never mind, great song, love the theme, and cant wait to hear it...any chance?

phill

4,759

(6 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi linus,

maybe if you substituted
" you opened my eyes
   and i realised..."
for;
"you gave me sight, the quest begins..."

it seems to go with the next line about the mystery part, please use it if it fits with your vision of the song [or if you think it's good enough]

hope i helped

phill

4,760

(11 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi rik,

i tried strumming along but the chord sequence is a bit strange for me not knowing how you intend the song to go. G to Em to Dmaj7 to C#m? i cant wait to hear the flow of the melody line.
the words and phrasing  are fine, but you will get a better grip on lyrics as you progress.
you say it lasts 4 to 5 minutes? you must play it very slowly or do you repeat the verse as well as the chorus. please understand i'm not criticizing your work here, just trying to understand what your doing and hopefully give some advice and help.

good song though and it shows that you are writing from the heart, rather than just slamming anything down to go with the chords.

keep it up

phill

4,761

(7 replies, posted in Songwriting)

thanks daddy and arkady, i did actually write the first draught of this on a sunday, just before she went ballistic over something i said, that was then this is now nearly thirty years later, and were still together..love all [tennis reference....get it?]

phill

nice one ark, i'll get over to ourstage later and see whats cooking

4,762

(8 replies, posted in Songwriting)

oh hell! teenage tragedy, we have all been there and suffered with rejection and the way your friends [and enemies especially] give you a load of grief over not being able to keep a girl, but thats my story, then when you get one who's really keen, the ultimate slap in the face; your forced to move away.
great tale well told
respect

phill

4,763

(9 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi daddy, another masterpiece, i take it barbara is the little lady [if not you'll be in trouble lol]

very personal bit history i think?

i like it

phill

4,764

(9 replies, posted in Songwriting)

cool it is my friend

phill

4,765

(6 replies, posted in Songwriting)

what a beautiful song,  i'm going to your web next. even if you haven't recorded it i still think the sentiments are so close to my life and i expect everyone else's that if you played it on a jew's harp it would sell a million. and yes how fortunate we are that we have found our life partners, i dont think i would like to take part in the race for a mate, is she? isnt she? i used to hate it when i was young free and single, now i'm old married and spoken for [very loudly] i'm happy and content to be in a monogamous relationship.

great song jeff

phill

4,766

(2 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi stealstrings, nice song, i can feel the sand and taste the salt air [under the palm trees?]

welcome and keep up the good work

phill

4,767

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi kap54,

very image intensive, i know you envisioned the american civil war, but to me it brought back the tv images of the german troops frozen on the russian front. it doesnt really get that cold in the south western uk [some wont agree with that ] so i cant imagine a body freezing solid as the life seeps away. life is so tragic, war is a travesty, and killing is the greatest crime against humanity and god. how the hell the human race has survived its own culling over the centuries is beyond me.
sorry this turned out to be another semon

so amen
phill

4,768

(9 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi daddy,
i love the way all your love songs are so obviously about your wife. "as long as your there lifes toils we share" thats such a brilliant line...well done

phill

4,769

(7 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi ark, kap54 and helena,
thanks for replying, i don't understand how this song hasn't come up on my web, it's not a very good recording and i'm in the process of rerecording it. i have been very busy for the last month or so, i had an intensive course for work and then i went on holiday, and i've been writing a lot of new songs, and i haven't even got time to finish one off before another on e begins, and you cant afford to let one slip away...know what i mean?
yes as usual your so right lena, jealousy is such a waste of time and emotion, especially when it's over something stupid like what this song was written about...just something i said about my ex!!! that was 26 years ago, i think it's passed now, but you never know?
thanks again
phill

4,770

(3 replies, posted in Songwriting)

nice words well written, it could as easily be a poem as a song, do you have a melody for them?

phill

4,771

(12 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi bluesky, like the yellow sub

songs come in different ways, sometimes i get an inspiration for some words and a tune comes with them, but if i dont record it straight away then i forget how the music goes and i usually have to rewrite the words to fit the new tune!! occasionally the whole thing comes as if i'd heard it on the radio, so i guess all i can say is; we all write in our own way, try just tinkling on a guitar or keyboard until a chord sequence forms a melody, then words will follow, then comes the hard part, get them to make sense to other people
hope this helps

phill

4,772

(15 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi kap54

i was a bit luckier than most of you, my dad was 77, a sudden and fatal heart attack, good for him, but you get the feeling you never had the chance to say all the things you wanted to.
sometimes when i smell a pipe or a cigar, i smile because i feel he's there watching and i hope approving. none the less, a sensitive and emotive work, remember they arn't really gone as long as you remember them.

phill

4,773

(6 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi griever,

liked the way you've put this together, sounds like a warm atmosphere i guess we've all been there at one time or another. these pubs are getting more and more hard to find, so tell me where is it?

good one keep it up

phill

4,774

(7 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Jealousyby Phill Williams


this is a true story from 1981.




verse




[Bm]It was a [G]Sunday morning, the [D]world was [A]good between us


[C]Never dre[F]amt how it would [G]end


[F]Not in a [C]month of Sundays, [D]not in a [A]million lifetimes


[C]Strange how[F] things can change [G]sometimes...[F]sometimes




verse




We were something special, We would always be more than lovers


No more than a minute can go by


When I don't think of you, love


And the things we do , love


Brings the tears to my eyes





chorus




[D]Jealousy, [F]jealousy, [Bb]jealousy[C], [A/D]jealousy


[G]Jealousy, [Bb]jealousy, [C]jealousy, [A/D]jealousy.




verse




Oh, my dear I love you, I put no other above you


Please believe me when I say


Although I'm not an angel


I'd never do you wrong girl


I'm yours forever if you want me




repeat chorus





4,775

(9 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi kap54,

i liked the song a lot, even though it is a little too close to home, the tanker drivers of one company have gone on strike here, [uk] driving up the price even further! and as a singer i'm a little worried that i may not be able to get to gigs, just as you are worried that you cant get to your delivery point. if the price of fuel is high in canada, us and australia, just imagine how crippling it is here, i was in oz last year and i couldnt get over how cheap petrol was out there compared to the uk.
and apart from all the politics your song takes me back to the protest songs of the 60's where bob dylan and his like thought they could change the world by writing songs in the hope of changing society. as long as there are employers and employees, governments and revenue collectors, tax men and taxpayers...society will always remain as the who say; " here comes the new boss, just like the old boss..."

sorry this is so depressing, i've just come home from holiday, i'm back in work tonight, it's 8.30 am, and i can't sleep, so i'm just ratty as hell.

love the song, keep em coming

phill

ps. is the internet the new cb?