1 Topic by Peatle Jville (edited by Peatle Jville 2023-04-04 06:53:55)

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Topic: Word Keys

Thank you to Jim aka TIGLJK for the last two words of this poem.

Word Key

Life is a typewriter with different fonts and different response.

Absurd and humorous.

Right and wrong and numerous.

Word processors tongue and cheek.

Out of our beaks is it answers to life’s questions we seek.

Whispering meek.

Or just loud words flowing down a creek.

Is it something profound.

Or something to be drowned.

Does the right to express thought have to be brought.

Do we have to believe everything we’re taught.

It is a young child telling us they have been finking about fings.

Or an adult raving after drinking too many strong things.

Breaking hearts torn apart by a tongue and words delivered with no heart.

Berating debaters and narrators.

The captains that stand at our helm and overwhelm.

While those below decks stop our ships turning into wrecks.

Dancing fingers on keys lighting up computers is what most people get to see.

Gone is the feather, the quill and the ink.

Still doesn’t mean that we can’t think.

Too many theories make me tired and weary.

Are they Canneries in a mine or words that are a waste of time and dreary.

I will switch off the computer, go for a walk.

Just let nature and beauty fill my thought.

While the lady concentrating on her phone walks into me.

Jolted back into reality apologizing profusely.

With no harm done I wonder if she knows the words, she just said to me are from a bible psalm.

It's only another ten seconds walking away from me.

She’s worshipping her phone again looking for certainty and approval..

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Re: Word Keys

Pedr, you're as deep as the Marianas trench my friend. You prove that with every new post. You prove it by taking everyday things and slotting them together in a humorous and logical way! Brilliant and topical as usual.     

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

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Re: Word Keys

Peatle
Brilliant observations, great writing. I agree w/ Phill 100%
As I read it, for my case it is spot on, the only change I would make in my case would be adding two more words on the last line. 
I think i would add to certainty, the words "and approval"
Well done my friend!!
Jim.     

Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

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Re: Word Keys

I think you are right Jim as kids these days rate themselves by how many "likes" they get rather than how many actual friends.     

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

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5 Reply by Peatle Jville (edited by Peatle Jville 2023-04-02 07:52:45)

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Re: Word Keys

Cheers, Piri and Jim, I have this weird theory that most probably is boring to most people, that behind every simple event is a slightly bigger picture to write about. I think your right the thirst for likes that people want never quenches their thirst for acceptance. For those who have an Internet addiction, all computer use can feel essential. With the rise in online banking, bill paying with business and doctors doing more online it's getting harder to get away from the internet. The agenda to get everyone online is going to be unhealthy for the mental health of many in the long run, I think. Jim, I like and appreciate your suggestion and I will add your two words to the end of my poem.

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Peatle, that is a brilliant piece of writing.  You have outdone yourself this time with this poem.  Loved it, connected to the message, well done!     

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Re: Word Keys

Thank you, Jan, I'm pleased my words made some sense.  For this upcoming long weekend wishing you and everyone, on chordie a good Easter.