1 (edited by ctech 2019-02-23 19:53:33)

Topic: Im a rainbow fallen angel

I was playing around on my keyboard and came up with this pop song instrumental.
Its not written in stone and may never complete it.
But thought i would post to get some feed back. Good or bad.

Listen to I'm a rainbow fallen angel by Ctech #np on #SoundCloud
https://soundcloud.com/user-415450650/i … llen-angel

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A good bit of Prog Rock going on there Ctech.     

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I agree with Peatle...very prog, so much so that it could have been an intro for a Yes song?

The structure of the song is great but I think if you added a counter melody it  would give the tune a little extra oomph?
So apart from that and the small timing issue, bring the bass up a touch and I think you'll have a winner.     

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4 (edited by Classical Guitar 2019-02-24 17:12:59)

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ctech I am impressed with the style of this one and the varying styes you have used on other ones. You are a talented individual.

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Music is life, that why our hearts have beats.

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ctech
you always do interesting music,thanks.     

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I liked the 'sitar' sound in the lead, but the electronic toms didn't really fit in there; although the bass drum sounded in place .... overall it was quite good, though ...     

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Peatle Jville cheers im just playing around with different ideas and seeing what i come up with.     

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Thanks for the input Phill ,counter melody? ill give that a try.  Yes timing is a bit out  ill fix that . I was thinking of breaking it down in to samples then constructing it again.  All time consuming. If i get it together ill repost.     

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Thanks Classical Guitar glad you like them. I dont think im talented i cant play as well as others and some write much better song but i enjoy what i do and thats what really counts.     

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Cheers Brian i did another on the same day ,ill add at the end of my replies.     

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Thanks neophytte, yeah that electric tom does sound a bit wrong my excuse it came with the keyboard,  The sitar sound was some synth sound.  Been enjoying yourcover hopefully more to come and if i can make a request, Id like to hear you do Leonard Cohen's Everybody knows.     

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ctech wrote:

Id like to hear you do Leonard Cohen's Everybody knows.

I don't know it, but have an attempt here:

https://youtu.be/0rswV5CP04I

Cheers

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Ray Davis of the Kinks once said he always wrote his songs on piano, something to do with "because I'm not very good at the piano". And I liked the synth drums!     

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Thanks for giving it a go, neophytte.
I love that song.     

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ctech wrote:

Thanks for giving it a go, neophytte.
I love that song.

Hope I did it justice (besides getting lost a couple of times, and faking it ...)

Cheers

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16 (edited by ctech 2019-03-13 11:14:10)

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Cheers Phill I may keep them in. I cant play piano that good,HAHA!

I wrote some lyrics and added the chords im using so far ,what do you think?

Chords A5 : Asus4 : Eb6/9 /G : C/G : F : Fadd9 : Csus4/F

You’re a rainbow fallen angel

Chorus
You’re a rainbow You're a rainbow you’re a rainbow
You’re a rainbow You're a rainbow You’re a rainbow
You’re a rainbow fallen angel

Verse 1
I"ve seen you out on the disco floor
With your bright blue hair, dressed like a whore
Millennial child,  that’s a crazy way you live
You treat your men like your upgrading  a phone
The rest of the fools are trapped in your friend zone
Feeding your lifestyle of all take and no give.

Chorus
You’re a rainbow you’re a rainbow your"e a rainbow
You’re a rainbow you’re a rainbow Your"e a rainbow
you’re a rainbow  fallen angel

verse 2
You give me the eye, so i take the chance
And make my way over to where you dance
The way that you move fills me with desire
Your pull is so strong i don’t care that it wrong
I know tomorrow that you'll be gone
So for tonight I'm going to set your world on fire

Chorus
You're  a rainbow you’re a rainbow You're  a rainbow
You're a rainbow you’re a rainbow You're a rainbow
You're  a rainbow fallen angel

Bridge
Oh oh oh oh oh oh oh oh hit me with your kaleidoscope
Oh oh oh oh oh oh oh oh hit me with your kaleidoscope

Chorus
You’re a rainbow you’re a rainbow You’re a rainbow
You’re a rainbow you’re a rainbow You’re a rainbow
you’re a rainbow  fallen angel
You’re a rainbow you’re a rainbow You’re a rainbow
You’re a rainbow you’re a rainbow You’re a rainbow
you’re a rainbow  fallen angel

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neophytte not to bad considering. I get lost and they are my own songs,haha!     

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ctech wrote:

neophytte not to bad considering. I get lost and they are my own songs,haha!

Hahah - when it's your own, you "improvise" smile     

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I know how most  people think from doing so many  concerts though  a long time. To me and the others that will hear you, you make it as perfect as reasonable. There is though a chance to make it so good no one could hear any variation.     

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Your instrumental track is very folk/rock so I was expecting your words to be more "gothic"? Inasmuch as I wasn't expecting a dig at modern dating...tinder, texting, followers etc. Expertly written and snuck in under the radar, so to speak. I'll be interested to hear the finished version.     

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Phill Williams wrote:

Your instrumental track is very folk/rock so I was expecting your words to be more "gothic"? Inasmuch as I wasn't expecting a dig at modern dating...tinder, texting, followers etc. Expertly written and snuck in under the radar, so to speak. I'll be interested to hear the finished version.

Thanks Phill ill post when its done. I surprise myself some times i start of going in one direction them bam the words just come from nowhere. I was playing around yesterday and come up with something that sounds ok folky or maybe im thinking as a western film opening track i would love to put a story lyric to it but my minds blank a the mo. I cant post the music as it realy rough me humming and whistling over guitar with added bass and sort of a drum track i played on keyboard. Im no drummer so sort off out of sync and made up as went along. Hard to keep playing for over 3mins.     

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