Topic: Thoughts of You

A scribbling in my mind
.
.
.
Thoughts of you,
I let them slip out
Or they let me let them
I'm not the one
Holding the reigns
I'm merely a decoy for them
A vessel,
A frail paper cup
Trying to hold the rain
These thoughts
Overrun amuck
Outpour, without constraints 

"I hide behind a mirror of knowledge, I'm never that what you see
It is my wisdom that emanates, and is perceived by you as me"

#penned #not_stolen

2 (edited by Peatle Jville 2024-11-12 08:00:36)

Re: Thoughts of You

Shivan, I like the way you write that from a feeling of vulnerability. Many good songs and poems have to come from a sense where do we belong in situations almost like an overthinking that most humans go through. So your words resonate and would connect with many in not a cliche way.. Sometimes I think when writing poems or songs about what we are feeling or our private thoughts  it's end goal should be to give the reader or the listener a license that it is alright to acknowledge they have had those feelings and thoughts also.

Re: Thoughts of You

Peatle Jville wrote:

Shivan, I like the way you write that from a feeling of vulnerability. Many good songs and poems have to come from a sense where do we belong in situations almost like an overthinking that most humans go through. So your words resonate and would connect with many in not a cliche way.. Sometimes I think when writing poems or songs about what we are feeling or our private thoughts  it's end goal should be to give the reader or the listener a license that it is alright to acknowledge they have had those feelings and thoughts also.

I do, however, feel like I'm really writing forcibly a lot of the times.....like I need to write something.....I think I need to soak in the world around a lot more to put a natural flow...thanks for your words
It's good to have my name called out in places like these....by good people like you     

"I hide behind a mirror of knowledge, I'm never that what you see
It is my wisdom that emanates, and is perceived by you as me"

#penned #not_stolen

Re: Thoughts of You

Ryuusei, even if you feel like you are writing forcibly, the main thing is, you can write your thoughts down and express them so well.   That doesn't come easily to everyone when it comes to writing smile     

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Re: Thoughts of You

Jandle wrote:

Ryuusei, even if you feel like you are writing forcibly, the main thing is, you can write your thoughts down and express them so well.   That doesn't come easily to everyone when it comes to writing smile

I guess that deserves a thanks it is true smile , but then you start feeling that you're just producing garbage sometimes.     

"I hide behind a mirror of knowledge, I'm never that what you see
It is my wisdom that emanates, and is perceived by you as me"

#penned #not_stolen

Re: Thoughts of You

Listen my friend, when you hear that voice in your head, as I understood from your words, it's from your soul, it's yours, yes as you write the first line or two they're easy. Then you may dry up. We all do. Then the hard work begins, finding words and lines that fit with what was easy in the first lines. Myself I write down stuff all the time in a scrap book then one day when the muse takes me I try to assemble them into some form of poem or song, which is why my stuff is sometimes messy.     

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

Re: Thoughts of You

Phill Williams wrote:

Listen my friend, when you hear that voice in your head, as I understood from your words, it's from your soul, it's yours, yes as you write the first line or two they're easy. Then you may dry up. We all do. Then the hard work begins, finding words and lines that fit with what was easy in the first lines. Myself I write down stuff all the time in a scrap book then one day when the muse takes me I try to assemble them into some form of poem or song, which is why my stuff is sometimes messy.

Wonderful! Now I can hear myself clear.... I was ranting.     

"I hide behind a mirror of knowledge, I'm never that what you see
It is my wisdom that emanates, and is perceived by you as me"

#penned #not_stolen