Topic: The Gate.

I was born and raised in a village out-side Llanelli called Llwnhendy. It was a farming and mining community, and as a child I remember the old men that had gone through the wars and then down the mines, their lungs were ruined by the gas and the coal dust. This is dedicated to them....

The Gate.   By Phill Williams.

Who stands there by the garden gate?
In his old brown shoes and his awkward gait.
He leans upon the post to breathe.
He gasps and coughs and wipes his eyes.

“I've spent many years digging coal",  he says.
“And dragging it out of that dark dingy hole.
So my lungs are now filled with that old demon dust.
It's a matter of time till I'm dust my-self.
But I've had a good life, a good wife and two sons.�
And many friends came when they buried that man.
They sang hymns, prayed and wept, and it rained for a while.
Sure his old wrinkled face, up in heaven, did smile.
As they spoke of their memories of the man.
The good things he did, his kindness, his charm.

And the gate stands there lonely, recalling maybe.
When the old man was young, when his lungs let him breathe.
No stopping- no time to open that gate.
He'd just take a short run and jump over it.
First girlfriend, first kiss, holding hands on the lawn.
And the day they came past in her white wedding gown.
And the day with the new born sons in his arms.
Then the day they brought their loves to meet with their dad.

Now the gate stands there lonely, the old hinges creak.
The metalwork's rusted, it hangs by a thread.
Until it falls to the floor and it's swept to one side.
The world must go on, though everything dies.

May 7th 2010.

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

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A great write Phill, somewhat happy, sad and nostalgic all at the same time. Good one.

Keep on Rocking and remember Animals Feel Pain Too.

3 (edited by badeye 2010-05-09 12:26:30)

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I enjoyed your poem Phill, My Dad toiled in the coal mine for some 44 years, raised 7 kids on coal, I have much respect for all miners for
it's not an easy job.



"When the old man was young, when his lungs let him breathe."  teared up over that line, that was Dad.



Great write..   badeye.

one caper after another

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thanks guys, it's a kind of true story, but i think that's what a writer does, he watches, observes then writes down what he (or she...sorry) sees. and if the writer is good, people enjoy what they read.

long live the bard

phill

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

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Sooooooo good Phil,

I could nearly heae his wheezing breath and see his watery eyes. Its so graphic.

I do believe the best pieces we write are from stored memories.

Way to go sir. 

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

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thanks helena,

grand praise indeed from the mistress of the story poem

phill

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

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I keep forgetting about the poem section roll   Sorry.

Phill my friend, Your as good at penning a poem as you are writing a song/recording a song/singing a song. smile

Top marks for this write. I was seeing your main character in the setting with the Rusty Old Gate right off the hop and had to read on to know the rest of the story.
Love how you used the gate as a reference to life carrying on.

Kudos

Kenny

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