• From: Chico, Ca.
  • Registered: 2007-09-08
  • Posts: 327

Topic: My annual wake up call/ Thanks to our native peoples

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PCSFz_YycYA

Our Lady                                                        m. mcvicker 2008


On this pier I step ashore
with my wits.. and not much more
among this crowd I’m pushed along
Many faces foreign tongues

I saw the lady as we sailed to sea
I thought her light not as bright as it used to be
and as the fog swept her breast
disappointment filled my chest
as we steamed from Ellis island

And the thousands that came to die for her
the land.. their blood  inters
The pride of many , the hopes of all
as we watch our love ones fall

she was there when we when we left the yard
Her eyes were closed, not to see
With her book, held in high regard,
she almost took the breath from me

Now with hope, I stand on another stage
Ancestral land I have engaged
With so many who leave in disgust
the land given in trust
to those who would stain her page

Oh those that came and we that leave
Sure we all know for those we grieve
Their lives were lost for which we stand
And it is we who became the ghosts of Ellis Island

I thought ; If I had one idea,
and took it from beginning to end.
I would try another.

marcalan's Website

  • Registered: 2007-04-03
  • Posts: 3,489

Re: My annual wake up call/ Thanks to our native peoples

While i love David Gilmore,

Your piece here holds its own merit alone.. I feel the lyrics of Gilmore's song over rides your words..

Its hard to listen  and absorb  both  while reading the sincerity of your work here...
Its a great write sir, us Irsh  are grateful we had Ellis Island to go to during the harsh times then and now..
I also have heard your chorus here to music some time ago now.. Please finish and record Marcalan
The lyrics are so lovely to your music..

Be well and Happy.
Hugs to you.

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !
  • From: Chico, Ca.
  • Registered: 2007-09-08
  • Posts: 327

Re: My annual wake up call/ Thanks to our native peoples

Is that me ma talkin?
Yes Maam

I thought ; If I had one idea,
and took it from beginning to end.
I would try another.

marcalan's Website

  • From: Chico, Ca.
  • Registered: 2007-09-08
  • Posts: 327

Re: My annual wake up call/ Thanks to our native peoples

Actually, I beg to differ
It is a perfect background counter and influencing to the soul of statement

I thought ; If I had one idea,
and took it from beginning to end.
I would try another.

marcalan's Website

  • Registered: 2007-04-03
  • Posts: 3,489

Re: My annual wake up call/ Thanks to our native peoples

Lord your so bold Marcalan,

I always try to give an honest opinion on whats posted here or on other threads..

I did give my honest opinion on your piece.  Yes you can beg to differ,that's your prerogative.
My humble opinion remains the same sir.

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !