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I am more of a songwriter rather  than a musician, so I will give you my slant. others on here will be much more of a help in the musical component.
I loved the song. When I read it, I  immediately thought of my nephew who has this ongoing battle with dyslexia  and depression, compounded by alcohol abuse.

I played it through using this progression   G  D  C  G  ( becaus e those chords are easiest for me    )
I think it needs a chorus that changes  the progression up.  As the song progressed, it was evident , at least to me, that the subject was reaching out for help in various ways.

As I was reading your lines and playing it through, this little chorus popped in my head
Em                 Am                                  C                                           G
Ooooh, I’m  reaching out, can't you see,  I could use a helping hand
Em                 Am                                        C                                     D
Ooooh,  I’m reaching out,  won’t you help me to make my stand
Em                 Am                                  C                                  G
Ooooh,   I’m reaching out, to  any kind     soul  still around
G                                                  Am                C                               G
someone like you to  help  me rise ,  and stay  up off the  ground

quite simple, but reiterates the message succinctly I believe.

if you don't like it just delete it
If you like it , feel free to use it.

It's just my humble opinion, but I think you've written a really nice piece that is applicable to many emotional circumstances, where we all could use some help. 

one last really minor detail - the line you use " i'm down hear on the ground"   the word "hear" should be "here"   you can fix that easily by going to edit. ( that's the teacher side of me coming through !:) )
Thanks for sharing and Welcome to Chordie !!

Jim
ps  can't wait to hear you perform it.

TF

Prog rock to me- is mood related.  sometimes I can listen for hours, other times its hard or me to listen to it.  I pretty much love Yes, Emerson  Lake and Palmer, Pink Floyd, and Iron Butterfly - not too familiar with many others , but probably if I went in my attic and dusted off the 400 vinyl albums there   I'd probably find a few more PR groups I listened to in college. 

Thanks for sharing your PR finds  TF.

Jim

Phill,

I caved in and bought a new computer  it has windows 10 on it.

No issues yet...like it a lot .... except the photo story program I used on my old computer is not available for windows 10. I gave microsoft an unpleasant communication on that.  But overall , the system is working terrific
Hope yours continues to be fantastic as well.

Jim

Roger

Fantastic !!
Enjoyed it very much
Jim

I liked it.

that was hysterical      turn off sound and you think he is playing for a metallica band.

by the reaction afterward - i would guess that he actually is the star of the band, not the singer.( although she was  excellent)
thanks for sharing

if it's Opie - you'll have to move to Mayberry NC
Dondra can be Helen Crump

absolutely.....

some people see roses, some see thorns

I personally liked it....   not as gut wrenching comical as some of their (Flight of the Concords) other performances.... but it was quite clever and well performed.
Thanks for sharing Peatle

Jim

241st birthday I believe !

Veterans, those who are serving now, souses of service people, and all the organizations that support the Military ( USO etc) 

THANK YOU ALL !!

unclejoe
enjoyed the elpaso performance.... BUT then I looked at the sawing of those rough boards video.  That was really cool - nice machine.  Wish I had one like that.
I saw a few other videos you posted working with large cut  lumber - is that part of your occupation or just a hobby ?   Really cool stuf.

ABSOLUTE SCAM