4,701

(10 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi jeff,

like this one too, it's another deep one, and i like the way you've put it together.
if only kids would pay attention to what we've been putting on here, maby we could straighten 'em out and clean up the world...now wouldn't that be a fine thing?

keep rocking

phill

4,702

(10 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi russel,

all 4 tracks were super [you understand that word...yes?]

LETS GET ONE THING STRAIGHT...I AM NOT ENGLISH, I AM WELSH, thats like calling a canadian a yank, i'd guess, or a texan a new yorker?

lets be fair though, the english did make up the language, so they can corrupt it just as much as you colonials do [i include the ozzies here too, and all the other pacific recreators of the queens english, [here we go, on about gays again...]

just so you know, i'm not gay either or homophobic, just another randy old man form over the pond.

breezin, centurian suite and all the others are all great music.

keep rocking

phill

4,703

(10 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi russ, you mean your not gay???  lol

i laughed out loud [honestly] when i heard the chorus, while i was at your website i stole a quick listen to your other tracks [cant remember names, it's an age thing] but the one you put on your stage was there too and still sounding top drawer, how did you do on that?

soap on a rope; as i was getting to the end of it [no pun intended] i was thinking; why cant he post this on chordie, then came the last verse!!!

are american prisons really that bad? we see all the movies over here, but i thought they might have been exaggerated slightly...

you'd think that tough guys would avoid the stigma of being a turd burglar as it might tarnish their street cred?

any way, keep your soap tightly on your rope [though you do seem to have a very high voice!] i'm only messing with you

keep rockin` boyo

phill

4,704

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

thanks roger, but i really dont think it's any good. it sounds to me like something i've done loads of times before, you know the same old riff, and not just me , i've heard the same riff played on loads of songs, i stuck the change to minor chords in to distinguish it from others, but i'm still not happy, i'm working at the moment on an orchestration which will be on a totally different musical theme [i hope].

thanks for your encouragement

phill

4,705

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Hi folks,

I've now put two very different versions of Rising Moon on Myspace. what I'd like is for as many people as possible to listen to them and then vote as to which version they prefer [if any]

version 1 is a sort of country thing

version 2 is more orchestral

the choice is yours

Phill

PS to get there just click website to your left...thanks

4,706

(3 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi kenny, boy racer, i always thought it was a red sports car that was the petrol-heads dream?

[that would read gas to you, we use gas for cooking food! lol]

nice one, do you need a chorus? some very prominent songs dont have one..."wonderful tonight" "something" etc, they just have a middle 8 or bridge [i call it a change especially if your only playing it once]

only exploring the possibilities, keep your options open and let the song flow

phill

4,707

(12 replies, posted in Songwriting)

roger,
jesus is that hard hitting or what? you certainly arent pulling any punches.

tell it like it is, spaced out, drug crazed [i almost said kids] people... are a curse and a danger to themselves and those around them, *there are none as blind as those who will not see* as you say in the song they all have this mistaken impression that they can stop whenever they want...

great song roger, a hard hitting story well told

phill

4,708

(15 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi again daddy, or should i say " the darbyshire linesman... and you line the main road?"

phill

4,709

(14 replies, posted in Songwriting)

wow russel, you want me to go up against those songs? they all sound so professional [and a bit rap] i dont like rap and modern free form jazz i can listen to most other forms of music!

the first couple of songs were very pro as if they were done in a real studio by pro's, whereas my effort will fall very short.

i have been trying to think up some kind of theme to use as a background, then coming to the fore between a couple of the verses, but nothing original yet, i keep getting peter and the wolf.

but i havent dismissed it or given up just yet, i'll let you know when i've got something. i find it's best to let these things work themselves out in their own time.

still happy to hear suggestions

phill

4,710

(13 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi mark,

nice song and good performance, you certainly brought the characters to life i could visualise the couple approaching then walking away from each other and the feeling that if only...

great one, cant wait for the finished version

phill

4,711

(10 replies, posted in Songwriting)

i like songs with characters you can identify, we all know a billy "good at drinking, but not at thinking" in fact i know a few...i'm no good at either, but i do know i like this song

phill

4,712

(13 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi getfiddle,

i dont know about tongue twisters but those chords are definitely finger dislocators!!! i notice even chopro couldnt work them out.

this is no criticism, but can you explain the part where you say
" i look in your eyes, i see love it's no surprise
when you look into mine what do you find?"

it sounds like "if you dont find love it's because i dont love you" [figuratively speaking], is that what you meant or am i looking for something that aint there?

it's another good one

keep strumming

phill

4,713

(15 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi daddy, or should i say robert?

back to cowboys then? i bet you wear all the gear when you go line dancing, two left feet myself gave up trying years ago

good one keep em coming

phill

4,714

(19 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi ark,

i've just chucked my whale song in the bin, lunar spirits is top drawer, love the sounds, high tide is good too, yer dooin a fine job there laddy

phill

4,715

(14 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi james,

your right, your never short of a big idea. i've been a fan of chamber music since elinor rigby, and i do love peter and the wolf. do you think it's good enough to be even looked at by a proper orchestra?  it would be wonderful, do ya know any orchestras?
sounds like the strings on my mu50 are gonna get a hammering again.

thanks for giving it thought.

now i must go, i've got 3 new songs waiting for vocal parts on my recorder. by the by, did you sort out your mic problem?

phill

4,716

(8 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi james,
have you offered this one to status quo, thats not criticism they happen to be one of my favorite bands.

i'm guessing a doofus is a kind of dick...yeh?
so that makes me one...
i love cleverly funny/humorous ditties and this is one of the best

and if you've gone for a hiss, we'll See you in a couple of shakes ha ha

phill

4,717

(14 replies, posted in Songwriting)

thanks guys, i'm very encouraged by what you've said, i was expecting someone to say "yo man dis site is fer songs only" so thanks for the comments.

i'll give the major/minor thing a go russ, but at the moment no melody line comes to mind.

thanks daddy, i hope you've got a nice melody to go with the C to F riff.

yes it is rather long [and long winded] for a song james

thanks kap, i could see the trees and foxes myself as i put it all down. [54 eh? well i'm 57 at the end of this month, so there!!!]

i'll keep all your suggestions in mind

love and tree hugs to you all

phill

4,718

(14 replies, posted in Songwriting)

this started life as a song, but by the time i got to the 3rd verse i decided it was more of a poem.

comments please.

rising moon

lost in the heat of a summers day
forget that winter soon holds sway
days last longer, darkens late
build your nest furry friend, don't wait

see the trees how they seem to age
their leaves turn gold, their life to fade
summers heat to autumns gloom
seldom seen the rising moon

the nights draw in, the days grow cold
summers birds have up and flown
winter night sky, clear of cloud
crystal beauty, how cold it is now?

autumns gold lies under foot
crumbles lightly at your touch
wake to dew upon the grass
summers warm never lasts

cold yet calm some nights may be
others howl make creatures flee
hide in burrows deep and safe
high above wreaks winters waste

frost begins to take it's toll
while rivers trickle ever cold
on distant hills snow will fall
and in the dark woods foxes call

what is hiding in the shadows?
silent ambush where path narrows
furry beast where death he meets
every beast has need to eat

majestic oak once ruled this land
from mountain stone to coastal sand
now the woods are owned by pine
and the forests in decline

failing too are beasts that roamed
under branches they called home
through seasons warm or cold or wet
soon be gone, soon we forget

as winters broom begins to sweep
furry friend find nest to sleep
to wake again when the air grows warm
descending moon on summers dawn.

by phill williams 2008

i know it's not a song, but then neither is rap, unless there is some tunesmith out there who can fit music to it?

now i like the thought of gently strumming someones beaver or is that caster? a friend of mine had a broadcaster and it didnt look a bit like a telecaster as it had 3 pick-ups and a shed full of knobs to play with if i remember correctly [it's old age catching up i'm afraid]

to flatpicker, ass is a kind of donkey, arse is what you sit on

4,720

(11 replies, posted in Songwriting)

perseverance in deed.

lovely lyrics, reads like a poem or an ode to the joy of love and friendship.
sweet and tender
just one more word ...beautiful

phill

4,721

(8 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi james,

another gem. i wasnt a member when you first posted this one, so it's my first time...be gentle with me, and those little blue pils!

got to say i had a chuckle, and i cant help wondering if in the first chorus you meant to say;"now she's so much older" instead of "bolder" ??? chickened out, me thinks?

i have 9 grandkids, sorry correct that i have 8 and a half grand kids, no 9 is due in october, and i'd recommend it to anyone, their a great source of inspiration

great song james

phill

4,722

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi james, when i played this i went naturally into johnny cash mode with a g to d etc bass line

as you say; nice bit of whimsy

like it

phill

4,723

(2 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi kyle, if you play this long enough it will get a bit boring for you, can i suggest varying the sequence a bit, try;

F-F7-C-G| F-F7-C-C7|F-F7-Bb-G7-| C-Bb-Am-F||

if your playing it in the key of "F" the natural chord to play would be G minor, if on the other hand your playing in "C" you should start the sequence with a C chord to be musically correct as i was corrected some time ago by a classically trained keyboardist.

feel free to ignore this if it makes no sense

phill

4,724

(11 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi kap,

when i saw the verses unfold before me i thought it was going to be a song of epic length, but then it ended with a bang [or flash] i thought you said it was up beat?

a tragic tale my friend, so not every one realises the "american dream" then? and just in case there is someone out there that still believes it, the streets of london aren't paved with gold, but the road to hell is paved with good intentions, thats enough cliches

great song, looks finished to me, but your the one that matters, if you think it needs more work i'll wait to see the finished version.

good work, keep it up

phill

4,725

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi zurf, i've got one hell of a lump in my throat!

you've put this together so brilliantly, and the words give the sentiment so well.
we have all experienced a death in the family at one point or another, i lost my mother and father a few years back in close sucesion, but i always believe that if you think of someone often they never truly fade into nothing. so keep his memory alive and he will always be there.

lovely song

phill