hi william,

i've got to agree with kap54, you do have a way with words, i just wonder if you wrote it the way i played it?

take my word for it, writing songs is only half the fun, recording them takes you to the climax [specially if people like it]

great song

phill

i'd just like to thank roger and kap54, for their help once again with the formatting, i managed it on the last song i posted!
any how thanks again.

glad you both like the song, the chords are a pain, but i've got a funny natural singing key i suppose, and i wrote this on a piano, it has been recorded, i'll have to check it to see if it's good enough to put on myspace [most of the other recordings were below standard]

ps got your email kap and yours william, thank you

phill

thanks for the invite roger,
oh damn, thing is i've just come back from holiday [in spain, just round the corner from you ]
if only you'd said sooner 

phill

hello mr mcready, and welcome to chordie, you get snow at christmas?  nice song with good lyrics and measure, have you been writing long?

i tend to sing songs like "white christmas" on hot summer days and "summer holiday" at christmas just to wind people up, and it works

keep the faith

phill

hi jeff,
another good-un. sorry but we brits seem to be under the misconception that you yanks are as the saying goes;" over paid, over sexed and over here" well it seems one was not quite right anyway.

great song and as with all the others it brought back some memories of harder times, like when i was about 5 years old [1956] we still had sugar rationing, and seeing my aunty megan pour her tea into the sugar bowl to clean up the very last bits that were in it. having to bathe with my older sister in an old tin bath in front of the fire, going into other peoples gardens to steal apples, gooseberries or even runner beans, cos we were so hungry. i could go on but everyone has their own memory of those [happier?] times.

thanks for the reminder

phill

hi again,

as far as recording is concerned; i do mine on a digital recorder then down load onto an MP3 player then onto the computer then to chordie, sounds complicated, it cant be cos i can do it!

roger, i noticed suggested just getting a cheap mike and plugging in directly to you computer, as long as you've got a reasonably new machine you should have no problems as it eats up your ram, then your machine will freeze up, 2 gigs should be well good enough. dont over record and make sure you get a good balance with guitar and voice. then you will need to join myspace to upload your songs so we can all benefit from your talent. if you get stuck, just ask theres always plenty of help and advice here.
hope this is useful

phill

hi sf7.

nice long song ,i wonder how it goes?
it's a similar theme to "once i had a secret love" as in you dont want anyone to know about your romance!
one question; do you play the chords as a kind of riff? you know play them one after the other with each vocal line over the top? or is there a beat and the chords shape the melody line? oops thats two isnt it?
never mind, great song, love the theme, and cant wait to hear it...any chance?

phill

hi rik,

i tried strumming along but the chord sequence is a bit strange for me not knowing how you intend the song to go. G to Em to Dmaj7 to C#m? i cant wait to hear the flow of the melody line.
the words and phrasing  are fine, but you will get a better grip on lyrics as you progress.
you say it lasts 4 to 5 minutes? you must play it very slowly or do you repeat the verse as well as the chorus. please understand i'm not criticizing your work here, just trying to understand what your doing and hopefully give some advice and help.

good song though and it shows that you are writing from the heart, rather than just slamming anything down to go with the chords.

keep it up

phill

oh hell! teenage tragedy, we have all been there and suffered with rejection and the way your friends [and enemies especially] give you a load of grief over not being able to keep a girl, but thats my story, then when you get one who's really keen, the ultimate slap in the face; your forced to move away.
great tale well told
respect

phill

cool it is my friend

phill

hi stealstrings, nice song, i can feel the sand and taste the salt air [under the palm trees?]

welcome and keep up the good work

phill