Topic: the song i scribbled on the other side of the paper....

this one's still kind of in bits and pieces but im kind of stuck on where to go, maybe somebody can give me some advice (or maybe somebody will be brave enough to tell me if i just need to scrap it and start over lol)


I've spent money like I had money to burn
And there's been days when I didn't have a dime
I tend to live a little more than I learn
But all the same I've had a pretty good time

I've picked a lot of guitar
And I've played, alot of real sad songs
Ive sat here at home too much
And stayed out on the road too long

(here's what I guess you could call the chorus but its very rough and unpolished so far)

Have I had a good life?
Well that depends on what the standards are.
Ive laughed a lot and cried a little,
but never had a built in pool in my back yard
And am I happy?
Well that depends on who you ask and when
Most days I feel okay
But even rednecks get the blues now and then.


And thats as far as I got, comments/suggestions? smile

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Re: the song i scribbled on the other side of the paper....

Hi last-rebel

"Even Red Necks Get The Blues! I would use as the Name!

First four lines you already have, as the chorus?  Then use the rest in another verse?

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

3 (edited by last_rebel 2007-10-12 16:40:21)

Re: the song i scribbled on the other side of the paper....

or maybe the last four lines as the chorus, and the first four as the verse, cuz then I could use the redneck line more than once and it was my fav. what do you think? (I'd take out the 'and' of course)

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Re: the song i scribbled on the other side of the paper....

Yes! i agree Darlin,

That is to good a line to only use once. Its my favourite as well.

Go for it.

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: the song i scribbled on the other side of the paper....

Hi last_rebel - I very much like the 'I tend to live a little more than I learn' line - absolutely dead on!  Can be the central idea of this song (or another).  Play off that notion with some examples, or consequences, or some more lines of a similar nature.  That line is a gem.

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6 (edited by last_rebel 2007-10-13 19:29:52)

Re: the song i scribbled on the other side of the paper....

okay here's the gameplan so far: having taken in the greatly appreciated advice i have something to work with.....

The verse that James liked opens it up,

The 'rednecks get the blues' verse as chorus

Another verse (which I have yet to write) following the idea of the first verse (as James reccomended)

And then somewhere I'll slip in what WAS the first part of the chorus as an additional verse.

  I f I have time I'll work on it tonight and be sure to post a completed version, (hopefully with some chords) within the next week or so. Thanks so much for the help yall, I think we might have this one on the right track

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Re: the song i scribbled on the other side of the paper....

Hi last rebel - great lyrics!

forgive my presumption but how's about changing the line in the first verse to

I tend to live a little more than I earn

that fits in with the cashflow blues thang, then maybe a coda at the end with the original lyric to make it a wistful regret type of song ending on some kind of minor chord?

take care

BoneDaddy

I'm the son of rage and love