• Registered: 2010-12-12
  • Posts: 72

Topic: under a wave [song start]

Ive been trying to write this song for some time now, the music is a little generic, but i`m more interested in you all being critical of the verse and chorus. I put chords on I see thats what most of you all do. hopefully the song explains itself [buried a very close friend, She could have been more]

I used a capo on this..second fret. I don`t sing much and this is me..forgive that, I`m not pretty.

under a wave

https://soundcloud.com/lane1777/under-a … e2/s-YrK6k


verse1
      C
The memories               
                                              Am
have not always been kind.
                               F
The time for crying...
                                       G
the time We walked away.

verse2
  C
There was a softness,
                          Am
We held the night.
                                       F
There was never a promise,
G                      C
and I said good-bye.

chorus:
                               F
It was just like thunder

G                        C
just like the rain.

      F       
a heart without love

G                       C
ship without sail.

                       Am
It's all like thunder,

                                F
and so hard to explain.

                             Dm
it is Just like falling,

G                                   C
and going under a wave.

verse3

C
Time is a desperate thing,

                             Am
hearts can survive.

                                  F
Remember the fragile things,

                                       G
and the tears people cry.

verse4

    C
Look at Me wishing,

                               Am
on every star above.

                           F
Look at Me praying,

G                                 C
She were here to love.

bridge:

F
Here I am
                           G
among the polished stones,

  C                                   Am
leaving notes in the bitter cold.

  F
Here I am,

                   G              C
saying good-bye again.


chorus:

                                    F
and It is just like thunder, 

G                       C
just like the rain.

F
a heart without love,

G                       C
ship without sail.

                         Am
It`s all like thunder,

                                  F
And so hard to explain,

                          Dm
It is just like falling,

                       G            C
and going under a wave.


tag:

                        Dm
it is just like falling
                       G            C
and going under a wave...

  • From: Gainesville, Virginia USA
  • Registered: 2006-03-04
  • Posts: 2,512

Re: under a wave [song start]

Enjoyed it Lane. Sounds great and plays well too. The lyrics are good the way you have them, but let me know if you want help putting it in chordpro format.

J  E  T  S
...and yet a Washington Commanders fan (unless they change their name again) ...long story...HTT...C

jets60's Website

  • From: Scott County, Virginia, U.S.A.
  • Registered: 2008-03-19
  • Posts: 794

Re: under a wave [song start]

Very nice song Lane, thanks for sharing.

Live in the "now" - a contentment of the moment - the past is gone - the future doesn't exist - all we ever really have is now and it's always "now".
  • Registered: 2010-12-12
  • Posts: 72

Re: under a wave [song start]

thank you for taking a look at this, hey J, as soon as I believe I think its finished maybe you can guide me through that process. I`ll leave it on awhile, and just dump it. I have to find a real singer to do this, male/female not decided that yet. 

Nice to meet you..bluejeep, thank you for commenting.

  • Tyson7
  • Senior Member
  • Offline
  • From: Wisconsin
  • Registered: 2011-04-25
  • Posts: 493

Re: under a wave [song start]

Lane,  I wouldn't change a thing. This is one of the best songs I've heard in a long time. The best one's always come from the heart. Sorry you had to lose someone so close. Keep on writing.

Joe

Tyson7's Website

  • dino48
  • Honoured Member
  • Offline
  • From: los banos,california
  • Registered: 2007-04-06
  • Posts: 6,801

Re: under a wave [song start]

nice easy song that is pleasing too the ears,good job lane.

my papy said son your going too drive me too drinking if you dont stop driving that   Hot  Rod  Lincoln!! Cmdr cody and his lost planet airman
  • From: Osceola, Indiana
  • Registered: 2013-05-03
  • Posts: 51

Re: under a wave [song start]

Don't sell yourself short. Wish I could sing that well. I think the song is great as is.

jackde's Website

  • From: The Land Of Song
  • Registered: 2007-12-10
  • Posts: 5,649

Re: under a wave [song start]

hi lane, really good song. they say all the best country songs come from some kind of heartbreak. i think your voice suits the song perfectly. loving the backing track too. if there is one fault it is that you've put too much volume on the mixdown so that the song distorts a bit, but that's just me wanting perfection. i cant get it on my own stuff either!

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

Phill Williams's Website

  • Registered: 2010-12-12
  • Posts: 72

Re: under a wave [song start]

thank you all for commenting, I`ll visit your websites and leave a note.

hey Phill, I have the music track in true C, but I pitched it up..6.072...lol thats a lot, I`m just learning tech stuff, and having with it all. trying to teach myself how to harmonize now, and mix it.

  • From: The Land Of Song
  • Registered: 2007-12-10
  • Posts: 5,649

Re: under a wave [song start]

i've been trying to harmonize for over 40 years....trying being the operative word, or very trying as the wife says

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

Phill Williams's Website