Topic: RHYME

Rhyme
i`ve been having a conversation
about my observation
about rhyme
should it happen all the time
you say yes i say no
one of these days
i`ll change my ways
but on reflection
and at your direction
perhaps i`ll write more rhymes

or maybe i won`t 

The King Of Audio Torture

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Bravo!!  Excellent job of conveying an idea in a just few short lines.  No wasted words, very concise expression of thoughts done in an AABBC rhyming pattern. It would be an great start for a song IMO.     

I want to read my own water, choose my own path, write my own songs

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Brian you are a Zion
Your mind is a lion
Made me laugh till I'm cryin'
I bet the ladies are sighin'
In the shops they stopped buyin'
Your words were not lyin'
May your pen never run out of ink     

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

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Brian

Let's not confuse poetry with just a rhyme
similar sounds, with thoughts sublime
June and Moon and Fox in the box
alliteration, metaphors, and paradox
Cat and Rat, Free as the Sea
not meter, not octave, nor simile

a man from Nantucket, and sometimes worse
hyperbole, litotes, Shakespeare's blank verse
it's all good, whatever you choose
as long as you're writing, you can't lose
if you're wondering how this will end
it's two sestets, sans iambic pentameter, sans couplet !

smile 

Keep on keeping on my friend !

Jim     

Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

"Use the talents you possess, for the woods would be very silent if no birds sang except only the the best." - Henry Van Dyke

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love it love it,great conversation     

The King Of Audio Torture

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Brian if you run out of ink.
I will turn to drink.
Oh man .
That wasn't my plan.
To write words that stink.     

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I hope y'all will forgive me for hijacking this thread, but my friend Jeff Hartley, singer/songwriter extraordinaire and master of rhymes, near rhymes, inner rhymes and alliteration was recorded playing this nonsensical song he wrote at an open mic several years ago.  My grandkids thought it was the greatest song ever written and ran around my house singing the chorus after they heard it.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PakJiyEySsg     

I want to read my own water, choose my own path, write my own songs

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Brilliant, I can see why your kids could sing the chorus. Thanks for posting this tallented performer.     

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

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Good one Ken kids here in NZ would love that song.