Topic: Here's one that Iv'e agonized over.. help me with a good chord prog.

Itsa ballad about a relationship gone wrong. Its probably sounds best as a up-tempo 4/4 (southern rock-ish) in G or D, but I've also palyed it numerous times in Am, and others.. but it always comes out a bit dull.  Maybe its the words, although I've been told they are pretty good. I've wrestled with 2 chords/line versus 3/line vs 4/ line, in various combos, etc. Hey if it just plain sucks.. then tell me that as well.. I've seen some pretty good songs on here so far.

Both gentle and harsh criticism accepted.. Cheers!

"Back Then"

Her last words fell without a care,
Dancin' with her breath in the air,
And oh how my soul wept, As we shiver'd on the door step,
And my hand fought back another tear

Well that was an age ago it seems,
They way it always happens in a dream,
With tears in our eyes, our time passed us by,
And left us with nothing in between...

CH: And I know thought that night would never End
      And I know I swore forever to be her friend
      And I remember how lovely she said it was back then,
      But I just never could be her little twig to bend.

Somedays now I sit and wonder why,
We'd ever let ourselves live that lie,
But the Prozac and the wine, kept me in line,
And made it all feel real for a while...

CH repeat

Well I'll not sit back now and cry,
about all those empty days gone by,
But I'll never forget, all the nights I wept,
Thinking without you I would die...

FINAL CH: And I know I swore that night would never end,
                 As she  laughed away that last of the Gin,
                 With  her  love, her  life and her honor on the mend,
                 No I just never wanna live that way again,

                 And I just never could be her little twig to bend.

Re: Here's one that Iv'e agonized over.. help me with a good chord prog.

How about like this:
[D]Her last words fell without a care,
[A]Dancin' with her breath in the air,
And oh [Em]how my soul wept, As we shiver'd on the door step,
And my [G]hand fought back another tear

Well [D]that was an age ago it seems,
The [A]way it always happens in a dream,
With [Em]tears in our eyes, our time passed us by,
And [G]left us with nothing in between...

CH:And I [Bm]know thought that night would never End
      And I [A]know I swore forever to be her friend
      And I re[G]member how lovely she said it was back then,
      But I just [Em]never could be her little twig to [A]bend.

or something like it...

J  E  T  S
...and yet a Washington Football Club fan ...long story...HTT...WFT

Re: Here's one that Iv'e agonized over.. help me with a good chord prog.

Thanks jets60! I'll give it a go.

Re: Here's one that Iv'e agonized over.. help me with a good chord prog.

hi as i read it through i looked at c,f g but i think jets will sound more powerful...stay cool

love is life ,life is for love,keep a true heart and live life to the full....stay cool

Re: Here's one that Iv'e agonized over.. help me with a good chord prog.

Lovely Lyrics, with great imagery.

Well done to you.


Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: Here's one that Iv'e agonized over.. help me with a good chord prog.

i love these lyrics old doll!!  i wish i had written this one and i definetely see the southern rock in this one!!

"Fly on Proud Bird, At Last You Are Free"
-Charlie Daniels