Cheers easy beat. True its not my best I just thought I did post anyways. As to my thought prevoking songs. I'll have to be more careful how I say it. That's why Open your eyes has been taken down to be respectful to other users, coming across as a bit racist the word used as a marxist weapon to stifle debate ,but I was looking at it from the angle of true events no race.
Trevor
251 2018-01-18 08:41:41
Re: Don't let me go (4 replies, posted in Songwriting)
252 2018-01-17 08:11:01
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Thanks Richard glad you liked it.
Trevor.
253 2018-01-17 08:09:55
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Thanks Peatle Jville that was a long read. I believe the pre-Christians held personal responsibility highly. The nine noble virtues. It saddens me that most of what they believed has been destroyed.
I grew up in a religious community as a child ,I felt safe ,contented and loved how close and helpful people were. Move on till now and your own are not cared for there is no community everyone is fragmented,I'm scared to death for my children and grand children the world they will inherite is an ugly place. We live with delusion that we will all be one and get along but anyone with there eyes open can see this not to be true.we are living through the last days of our great civilisation. It happened to the Romans ,the Greeks ,the Egyptians and now us.
I belive like you the common man and woman want to live in peace but the media,government and religion wind them up,makeep them crazy. That why I have no TV, I don't buy papers,and I have no internet (only on my phone)just no 24/7 feed. I hope this makes sense. I apologise for any errors in my writing. A last word"All it takes is for good people to do nothing for evil to previal" Trevor
254 2018-01-17 07:36:23
Re: Don't let me go (4 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Thanks Peatle Jville I think you are right when I write from something real it comes out better, when not its sometimes a bit confusing.
255 2018-01-16 23:04:08
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Thanks Jandle, I went to a chirstian school,church ever morning and Sunday school and saw the merits in Christianity back then, but in this day and age I feel the pre-Christian belief suits me better. I doesn't mean I hate Christians I'm just following a different path.
256 2018-01-16 22:41:10
Topic: Don't let me go (4 replies, posted in Songwriting)
My try at a pop song. Not brilliant but thought
I'd post anyway. I recorded a take late morning
Which Ill tag on the end.
I don't do it any justice Though.my voice
try's to go high at the end Haha!
Don’t let me go
Verse 1
Fmaj7 Em7
If you knew how to love
Am
You wouldn’t walk away from me
Fmaj7 Em7
If you knew how to love
Am
You would be true
Fmaj7 Em7
If you knew how to love
Am
You would stay here and care for me
Fmaj7 Em7 Am
Then I would not feel so Empty and abused
Verse 2
Fmaj7 Em7
If you knew how to love
Am
You wouldn’t make me cry
Fmaj7 Em7
If you knew how to love
Am
You wouldn’t need to lie
Fmaj7 Em7
If you knew how to love
Am
You would give your world to me
Fmaj7 Em7 Am
And I wouldn’t be on my knees begging you
Chorus
Dm7 Gm7 Am Am7
Don’t let me go, I still want your love
Dm7 Gm7 Am Am7
Don’t let me go, I still need your love
Dm7 Gm7 Am
Don’t let me go
Fmaj7 Em7 Am
Cos I can’t go back to living without you.
Repeat Verse 1
Repeat Chorus
Fmaj7 Em7 Am
No I can’t go back to living without you.
© Trevor Scrivens 16/01/2018
257 2018-01-15 21:50:20
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hi ark its been along time. Thank you much appreciated. I can get a bit controversial. There are songs I've writen I could never put on here and never will. Sometimes the truth hurts and in today's world I find little truth because no one wants the responsibility it brings. I'll come down of my box now. Glad you enjoyed it.
258 2018-01-15 11:07:08
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Cheer phill I'm pretty sure I'm not 100% Anglo saxons ,but as you are proud of your heritage I am proud to be a man of Kent.
I had my dna done came northern European with a small bit of southern and eastern European.
I have three welsh names being Trevor Vernon and David given to me by my grandparents.Also loved rock climbing in North Wales as a teenager and love your meat and potato pies.
I find people are so easily offended now a days that why i say "no offence intended"
As for song writing we should express what will see and feel.good or bad.
259 2018-01-14 23:09:06
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hi TIGLJK it''s about how pre christians were treated and my awakening to the old ways. The one eyed wanderer is woden ,cattle die kindred die is from a viking poem. I hope that makes it more clear.
Trevor
260 2018-01-14 21:18:19
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Thanks phill, (I just wish I could do my own backing like you do so well) I was hoping to get that sound. Wait till you hear my next one . I wrote today. It's got that feel too. Just hope I don't upset any one with subject matter. As with this song no offence intended. I haven't read any books may look the writer up now you've said. Thanks again Trevor.
261 2018-01-14 08:52:55
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Cheers Beamer, much appreciated.
262 2018-01-13 17:41:09
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Thanks easybeat. Was trying to make it sound folky. I'll check out the group you mentioned. Thanks again for your input. I'll leave it now as writen.
263 2018-01-10 20:36:48
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
I did a rough track easybeat so you can get an idea of how it will go. The 2nd verse isn't right plus I forget to breathe which put me off note but hay ho. Let me know what you think.
264 2018-01-10 09:21:33
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Tenement Funster Fair enough.
265 2018-01-10 09:20:25
Re: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Cheers easybeat after I've learnt the song without mistakes I'll record it.
266 2018-01-09 17:08:44
Topic: The awakening (21 replies, posted in Songwriting)
This is a song I wrote from the perspective of
my pre christian saxon ancestors and how
it affected my beliefs. No offence intended.
The awakening 6/8 Time
Esus4
Verse 1
Am Amadd11/G G E
'Twas last night I had a dream
Am G6 Am
I was resting by an old oak tree
Am Amadd11/G G E
When appears a one eyed wanderer
Am G6 Am
And this is what he said to me
Chorus
Fmaj7/A C/G E Am
Cattle die kindred die
Fmaj7/A C/G E
Only the deeds of good men will live on
Am C/G E Am
So don’t be afraid to live your life
Fmaj7/A C/G G6add11 Cadd9/E Am
Falter and it will be gone
Verse 2
Am Amadd11/G G E
As I ponder the words that this old man had said
Am G6 Am
He told me stories of old
Am Amadd11/G G E
Of a corageous folk so strong and so true
Am G6 Am
Living Pure and simple lives
Verse 3
Am Amadd11/G G E
Then along came Christianity
Am G6 Am
Like a plague it swept through the lands
Am Amadd11/G G E
Bringing death, torture and misery
Am G6 Am
Killing the natural spirit of man
Repeat Chorus
Verse 4
Am Amadd11/G G E
I awoke with the sun in my eyes
Am G6 Am
His words ringing inside my head
Am Amadd11/G G E
I made an oath to rethink my life
Am G6 Am
And to honour my ancestral dead
Verse 5
Am Amadd11/G
I will strive to be strong
G E
I will strive to do right
Am G6 Am
And never cower away from truth
Am Amadd11/G G E
To live my life by the natural laws
Am G6 Am
And to die if I’m fated to
Repeat Chorus twice to end
© Trevor Scrivens 08/01/2018
https://soundcloud.com/user-415450650/the-awakening-1
267 2017-12-29 16:43:43
Re: Need Some Help With This One, Folks (2 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hi Strummerboy Bill I've come up with
G D7 G
Let the love bell ring
G D7 G
Let it ring let it ring
G D7 G
I'm just a doin' my thing
G9 Dm D7 G
Sayin' "I love you"
Then for the spoken bit G chord with D added ,C9 with D added and Dsus4 Dsus, .
Not knowing the game I can't write another verse maybe it doesn't need it. Hope this is of use to you.
Trevor.
268 2017-12-23 19:49:29
Re: some days (15 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Great song I look forward to hearing it. You are free to use any chords progression it's the melody and arrangement you can't copy I think.
269 2017-12-23 10:10:28
Re: My Fate (about wife beating) (23 replies, posted in Poems)
Well written phill,brought back memories of a lady I had a relationship with. The things she told me I could never repeat the man was so vile. They had children together which made things a bit tense. Me being an idiot I tried to calm things down respectfully. Which only made things worse, maybe he saw it as weakness. Anyways he found that to be untrue when he kick our front door open, he was met me putting him in a hold and throwing him straight out the door,after that he never caused trouble and her son saw me as a bit of a hero. Deep down I wanted to smash his face into the concrete but that is not what I wanted to show her children. They are all grow up and although me and their mother are no longer together we are still close. Their mum was deeply scared by him very sad.
270 2017-12-17 21:27:46
Re: Christmas without you (6 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hi Chris thank's for your kind comment. If you record it I'd love to hear it. I only wrote it today. I was thinking about an old girlfriend,not that I cheated on her,she died of cancer. On a brighter note Have a good Christmas.
Trevor
271 2017-12-17 19:47:01
Re: Christmas without you (6 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Cheers Jim it all came together from the chorus chords. Then wrote chorus lyrics, then had idea for verse chords. then part of 1st verse then 2nd verse then last part of 1st verse. Done . I like it when they come out of nowhere.
Trevor
272 2017-12-17 19:31:05
Re: Christmas without you (6 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Just for you TIGLJK I did a rough copy. Not perfect as only wrote it today some mistakes with lyrics haha! Let me know what you think.
273 2017-12-17 18:19:19
Re: Soundcloud version of Can't Close my Heart (3 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Great song TIGLJK. I would like to thank you as this song inspired my latest christmas song. How you may ask, well I was going through some chord progression's to see if I had something to offer to your song then bang another song was born.
274 2017-12-17 17:26:10
Topic: Christmas without you (6 replies, posted in Songwriting)
I wrote this today capo 3rd fret country feel
Christmas without you
Verse 1
C Em Em7
I look out of the window
F C
I watch the snow lay on the ground
C Em
Thinking back to happier days
F C
when I still had you around
C Em Em7
Then my life was so dammed easy,
F C
you made it that way
C Em
I was just the fool who couldn’t see
F G C
I throw it all away
Chorus
Dm7 G7 C
I put another log on the fire
Dm7 G7 C
Turn the lights down low
Dm7 G7 C
Turning up our favourite song
Dm7 G7 C
The one we loved to all night long
Dm7 G7 C
I close my eyes and I imagine
Dm7 G7 C
You are still here close to me
Dm7 G7 C
Dancing by the sparkling lights
Dm7 G7 C
On my Christmas tree
Verse 2
C Em Em7
I took advantage of your kindness
F C
the simple way you held my hand
C Em
And I would give everything
F C
to still be your man
C Em Em7
But there’s no coming back from cheating
F C
the mistrust that it weaves
C Em
So I'll pore myself another drink
F G C
knowing our love is history.
Repeat Chorus
Dm7 G7 C
Dancing by the sparkling lights
Dm7 G7 C
On my Christmas tree
https://soundcloud.com/user-415450650/c … ithout-you
© Trevor Scrivens 17 December 2017
275 2017-12-07 10:42:30
Re: Christmas time is here (5 replies, posted in My local band and me)
Thanks Peatle Jville I hear the reggae vibe. Probably the guitar part giving It some bounce.