hi peeps,

this one is almost a year old, it got written so quickly that i thought i'd nicked it from someone else, so i sent it to russ harding to ask if i had, he said "no..." but then i forgot about it, till the other day, so i thought i'd give it the full works.

sorry it's all in capitals i'm not shouting, even though it is an angry song, inspired by those tedious celebs with their entourage of minders and managers and make-up artistes, and people who are just there to make them feel important....no names mentioned.

it's already on my-space

Hi Tine,

Dare I say your a lucky person to have such a good friend?

I must commend you on your use of words and how honestly they come across.

Having read some of your other stuff, I know that you've been through one hell of a traumatic experience, for which all I can do is offer you my sympathy, but on the up side, and I don't mean to make small of it, you've got some great material out of it!

So another great piece of work, you do seem to be getting stronger all the time, so keep going, your masterpiece is just around the corner, [that's what I keep telling my-self, anyway].

Good luck and congratulations for having such a wonderful friend, and being able to talk about him and your situation so fluently.

Phill

Hi guys,

This poem I wrote today, yes it's about my love for my wife Ann, but there are also deeper more depressing parts about the fall of the iron curtain, and the rise of terrorism, the world resesion and lastly of our own mortality.

Hi Tine,

I must agree with my friend Kenny here, this is a very good poem, and would make an excellent song with 2nd verse as chorus.

I often find that it's the traumatic things in life that get the writing juices flowing. Lucky for me it's only heartache after an argument with my wife....yes we do argue...often, it's what keeps us alive.

I can only guess at what the subject is, and I offer my sincere sympathies and any support you may feel I can give.

Here's hoping your daughter can put all this behind her, I don't suppose you will forget it in a hurry, so chin up, and tell this animal to sling his hook, you've got a few hundred thousand friends that will be happy to come around and see him if he don't go, baby!

Peace and Love

Phill

you two got this covered between you, music wise i think a little banjo and jug bass would fit just dandy.

phill

ps. can't think of anything to add, this damn cold is blocking up my composing synapses.

hi lieven,

as a songwriter, and a poet...[both loosely described by myself, not by others] i find that the two are distinct and separate. if a song comes to me, it comes with words and music, it may not be the same music by the time i record it...but never-the less...and the same if i start to wax lyrical...and out pops a poem, to me the two are from different parts of the brain, so to speak, so i rarely try to put music to a poem.

if you have a tune you'd like to have words to lieven, just let me know, all i need is the recording and what you are thinking of when you play it.

phill

hear, hear,

wise words my friend and well written, i took a while to get the flow of the lyrics, but when i got there i was totally engrossed.

well done and thanks for sharing

phill

Two ladies...[1] Eva Cassidy and [2] Christine McVie [Fleetwood Mac]

Beautiful and natural voices.

And as a footnote, gimmicks can also detract as well as add to a voice. When playing live, a crap mic or cheap or badly constructed PA system can make even Pavarotti sound like a frog with a crow in it's throat!

I usually find a little reverb adds depth and a little sexiness to the voice.

Chorus adds fullness.
But if you can get away without using any...do

Phill

Kenny, knick knack paddywhack...I thought it was Hillary us...whoever Hillary is.

This is a bit risque so if your young don't look!

Two kids in a swimming pool...

Little Johnnie says; I'm gonna duck you

Little Mary replies; Oh no your not, you can't even say it properly

Same two kids walking along the corridor

Little Mary says; Look at that condom under the radiator

Little Johnnie asks; What's a radiator?

Hi Tine,

Not all men are the arrogant self-effacing, illegitimate sons of cross-bred curs that you are well entitled to believe we are! From past experience I know that an awful lot of young women go through hell at the hands of control freak boys, who will use for their own convenience any young lady susceptible enough to fall for their BS. how many times have I heard the same excuse that the female actually believes it's her own fault for getting a beating, or as in your case worse.

Personally, I'd have these guys torchered and flogged. There was an old punishment about 200 years ago, where first they'd be put on the rack, then hung, then before they died they'd be cut down and have their stomach sliced open and their entrails removed [while they were still alive!] then they'd be quartered, and the quarters would be sent to each cardinal point of the country....now that would make me feel better, and possibly deter any other **** from doing it.

Now I feel better for getting that off my chest!

A very poignant poem, and an excellent first posting, so welcome to Chordie Poems, and I hope we see a lot more of your very descriptive and eloquent work/
.

Phill