Re: January 2017 FSOTM - Chordie Members Original Songs!
I went back to listen, and find the heartbeats... I think what happened is that they were so "faint" compared to the guitar that they were difficult to hear. Of course, I can't listen to metal too loud so my volume wasn't turned up. I had to turn it up purposely to hear the heartbeats. I also wasn't wearing headphones. I think maybe if you put that clip in to start toward the end of the guitar - louder - while fading the guitar out quickly, it would work! I like what you were aiming at with it!
I also commented on both songs, but I think the heavy one may not have gone through. The heavy feels like it needs drums to be more complete, but the acoustic feels complete as is. I personally enjoyed the acoustic more, but I like how the heavier versions lyrics flow better (like Zurf said above). I still WILL at some point get to my pitiful version. LOL! I PROMISE!!!
What constitutes excellent music is in the ears of the listener.