i'll go to that concert too! there have to be enough chordie members to fill a medium sized venue?

helena, oops! sorry about the chorus opening...senior moments all round, keeps us all on our toes?

so, we've done some ballads, we've done a rocker...any suggestions where we go next?

ps. doesnt russ sound angelic?....yeah right!

phill

thanks helena,

grand praise indeed from the mistress of the story poem

phill

hi kenny,

been away my friend so now i'm seeing this. it did make my laugh, i chuckled till my chuckle muscle cramped.

very tongue-in-cheek. excellently written. it doesnt need a bridge in my opinion but to diversify it a bit you could maybe change key for a solo. it would be interesting if you went down a semi-tone? or just added an alternate chord sequence? just thoughts, not criticism.
is this the product of a miss-spent youth?

hope your well over there in canada.

phill

hi kenny, always a pleasure to hear from you. well thanks for that, i hope to be putting up some more new ones in the not too distant future. to be honest, i feel that i can only put up songs on here that have a strong story or is meaningful. some of my songs are not, so you wont see them, but you may hear them on my-space or sound click.

hi buvvy, ethereal....is that swearing?  thanks anyway

phill

thanks guys, it's a kind of true story, but i think that's what a writer does, he watches, observes then writes down what he (or she...sorry) sees. and if the writer is good, people enjoy what they read.

long live the bard

phill

hi lena, it began life as a song about a 19th century sailing ship that gets becalmed in the "doldrums?" i think that's an area of the caribbean? but that didn't really work so i found the fishing line (no pun intended). i was thinking about the cornish fishermen, or any of the south wales fishing ports, but bristol fitted best. i dont even know if you can get becalmed in the bristol channel?

hi geo, yes the water does tend to get very cold in the bristol channel, though it's more likely you'd die of pollution poisoning than the cold or drowning!

hi ark, while i was in spain, i walked along the marina looking for a yacht called coralina....i didn't find one though. maybe next year?

thanks to all

phill

hi C34 and welcome to the chordie poetry section. thanks for this your 1st entry, hope to see more of you and your work. please feel free to comment and advise your fellow members.

nice write

phill

as per your request kenny, you will now find this song on myspace...click left

phill

as it happens tony, i dont play flute either...chuckles

ian anderson has one of the all time greatest voices in my opinion, if i had but a little of his talent...

or for that matter, elton john's, i could go on...but i wont there are so many singers, songwriters and entertainers i admire, i'd be happy with some of their money...any offers?

OK, this is a very simple song:  D-to D add a Db Bass - then D add a B bass - you get the idea?

I recorded this in Eb, as D was too low, I think Eb is also too low! it'll be on My-Space ASAP.

This began on May 1, as I was brushing my teeth ready for bed. The first line came to me, but I was too tired so I wrote the rest next morning. It wasn't meant as a sad song, or as a fisherman's shanty! Story is; early 20th century fishermen (from Bristol?) find themselves becalmed in the Irish sea, they decide to row for home. One lad has got his young lady in the family way, and they plan to marry next day. Sad ending, they meet a steamer coming from Bristol in the fog....

for my part, i'd like to thank everybody. coralina was an easy song to put words to. it's funny how we were both on the same track content-wise with-out actually discussing what path we were taking.

i wrote the words, by the way, as an office dwellers day dream about his sailing yacht somewhere in the caribean...it's not about a woman or sex, though i guess a 30 foot yacht might be a bit of a babe-magnet?

phill

thanks to all for commenting, as always it's a pleasure working with russ, hope you have a nice visit with your sister.

i got the indian vibe when russ first introduced me to the song, i admit i was a little dubious at first, but with some trans-atlantic idea bouncing i think we got a result.

well i'm so shocked, in the first posts (which i unfortunately deleted...ooops!) "magical mystery tour" was mentioned...now ELP and my great favourite, vocally, musically and song-writing-ly(?) ian anderson, along with the lennon/mccartney comparisons....have i died and gone to song writers heaven?

thanks everyone

phill