you're not going to leave it like that are you? as you say, i don't think it would work as a song or poem but it is the start of a great adventure story. what does the open box reveal? where will the contents take you? another world? another time? come on get writing.     

Peatle, now it's a three way? On first reading I thought your last verse was too long but I can see now that the last four lines could be a chorus or a bridge?

With all these days of doing nothing I've hardly picked up my guitar, must start practicing again.     

Love the sound of your 12er, very mellow. Now for the bad news....I think your chord structure will make a great (last?)love song, but what you played is in 4:4 time, 6:4 is a waltz time with twice as many beats to each bar. Do you have any stomp boxes with a metronome? Or download from the net. Look forward to hearing the finished recording.     

here's my attempt at a second verse...

what you worried 'bout dad?
you let go the good one you had.
all that free candy.
all so handy.
on hand for you.
but you lost her cos you were greedy.
so many others and you so needy.
i got bad news.
you don't get to chose.
the candy shop is closed for you.     

nice one grah, you don't say if it's original? i was expecting a bit of boy george....only kidding     

beamer liked that so much he said it twice..lol

i also liked it. does Maree? (i hope i spelt that right?) is it about your lovely wife or just imagination? don't worry i wont tell...     

I too am a grandfather and great grandfather so I agree with Jeff and you about the joy they bring. As I grew up in the countryside I can also go along with your nature sentiments. I won't go any further than that! Sorry.

Your song, the wording and metre are superb as usual and in my imagination I can hear it being sung by a gospel choir. I hope you can get one to do this the justice it deserves.     

yes i can imagine it with a banjo     

Don't want to lay like a bump on a log...what a fabulous line! That's saying something in a song full of great lines. If I have one small criticism it might be a tad too fast. But a great performance none the less     

Hi Jim, thanks for the good review. Yep, it seems one day you're changing nappies next you're feeding your grandkids!

Look forward to our next colab, I seem to have dried up at the moment, I had to buy a new note pad and the blank pages are freaking me out...lol     

I had the same problem when I up graded from win 7 to 10 . The only cure/work round I could find was to buy a new printer as the old one apparently was not  designed for any o/s higher than 8 ! Try updating your driver's?     

Oh I just remembered, I got the free win 10 upgrade so almost nothing worked! In the end it crashed and I had to get the disk and reinstall.