2,026 Reply by Jandle

(28 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Grah1 wrote:

Got to agree with Bill re the chorus and bridge as part of the structure of the song it helps to engage the listener  especialy in a long song I'd like to hear a guitar version  mainly because I'm not a great fan of the uke for a serious ballad like this one,having said all this I do like the content and your delivery ,your voice is good and has a distinctive tone .Very well done

Thanks Grah1 for your comments regarding the chorus and bridge, noted and thanks smile    I think most (not all) guitarist aren`t so keen on the ukulele, i can actually understand that, it doesn't have the depth a guitar has for one.  I sure would love to be able to play the guitar well myself.  Anyway, feel free to have a go at this one with guitar, love to hear your version smile

Glad you liked the content and delivery, thanks, appreciate that.

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2,027 Reply by Jandle

(28 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Strummberboy Bill, thanks for taking a look at my song and the great feedback smile  Actually your right, they are pretty much " let me get right to the point" lyrics aren't they, lol, hadn't thought of it like that.

You mentioned it probably need a chorus particularly for guitar ......  well all the ones with "I`ll just stop asking" even though I know each one changes ever so slightly was meant to be my chorus,  maybe I should have or should write above each one of those chorus.... which brings me to ask the question......can you actually change the lyrics slightly on the chorus? not sure if this is the done thing?, would appreciate your opinion or anyone's opinon on that.

Cheers Strummberboy smile

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2,028 Topic by Jandle

(28 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Hi everyone,

this is a new song I wrote this week, my second song ever.  I play it on the ukulele but it would be nice on guitar too.  Love to hear your opinions, thanks. 
You can hear my version of it on sound cloud under the name of kiki Jan        https://soundcloud.com/ukulelejan/ill-stop-askingmp3 

[I'LL STOP ASKING]

[EM]
I'll just stop asking
[AM]
I won't show I care
[D]
I'll just stop asking
[EM]
Though I love you my dear

It seems no matter
What I ask or how,
You don't want me asking
You made that clear somehow

So I’ll just stop asking
I won't show now I care
I'll just stop asking
One day I won't be there

I tried to show interest
I tried to advise
But you heard only nagging
That’s all it was in your eyes

So I'll just stop asking
I won't show how I care
I'll just stop asking
One day I won't be here

I have thoughts and opinions
I`d love to share with you
But you don't want to hear them
You wouldn’t give me your ear                           

So I'll just stop asking
No more will I try
I'll just stop asking
No more will I cry

You thought me interfering
That’s what you were inferring
You say I use a tone
So I`ll leave you alone

I`ll just stop asking
I`ll make sure to stay clear
I`ll just stop asking
But remember I love you dear.

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2,029 Reply by Jandle

(5 replies, posted in Poems)

TF thanks for sharing, I can understand that actually, its got to be for the enjoyment and pleasure to sing, perform publically, rather than pressure from people otherwise it just performing without passion or soul.  Thanks I might give your song a go smile

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2,030 Reply by Jandle

(30 replies, posted in Songwriting)

mojo01, great song, like everything about it and your voice is great smile

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2,031 Reply by Jandle

(15 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Grah1 I love this song, the lyrics, the voice, the music, fantastic!

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2,032 Reply by Jandle

(5 replies, posted in Poems)

TF another great one, definitely understand the feeling behind it, its hard to sing, play music publically, something I had to overcome and decided to overcome myself.  It is a challenge that's for sure, but glad I have now.  Love what you have written, great as a poem but have to say I would love to hear this as a song as well smile

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2,033 Reply by Jandle

(3 replies, posted in Poems)

short and sweet as they say ...... good one Easybeat smile

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2,034 Reply by Jandle

(4 replies, posted in Poems)

TF really good, understand it too with kids of my own.  I too can hear this as a song smile

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2,035 Reply by Jandle

(3 replies, posted in Poems)

Great poem punkrawker, I like it and think it would make a fantastic song *nudge nudge* smile

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2,036 Reply by Jandle

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Thanks Grah1 for that smile

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2,037 Reply by Jandle

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Thanks Rickyjack, i like this song TIGLIK wrote, I tried to do justice to it smile

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2,038 Reply by Jandle

(5 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Marian, not really other than when i downloaded it earlier this year but like you found it hard to use........i need to sit down and read up on how to work it properly i think.

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2,039 Reply by Jandle

(5 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Really good Marian, like the version without the echo, the single voice version smile

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2,040 Topic by Jandle

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Hi, had a go at Jim`s song Porch Groovin` as i liked his song.

I had to change the gender from "girl, she"  to "man, he" and the line "grab my ol guitar" to "grab my ukulele" as that is what i am playing.

I tried to play a cajon as well to give it a bit more depth, this was a bit of a challenge for me as trying to dampen down the noise of the cajon which can be over powering with a boom boom boom sound.  Also trying to sing, play ukulele and keep the beat on the foot pedal for the cajon all at the same time whilst recording was an interesting challenge.....hopefully i will get better as i practice this more.

You can find me on Soundcloud under the name Kiki Jan..... sorry not sure how to post the link here.

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2,041 Reply by Jandle

(7 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Really like this Mojo01,  everything about it, cant fault it in anyway, easy listening, one i would listen to often and would quite easily listen to on a road trip.

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2,042 Reply by Jandle

(8 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Good lyrics  Beestie, like how you have mixed up your style of play in this one.

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2,043 Reply by Jandle

(3 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Really good Mojo, like the words, the style, I had a listen to it on Soundcloud.  Impressive smile

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2,044 Reply by Jandle

(9 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Interesting little number this one Brian and i can see you talking this one smile

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2,045 Reply by Jandle

(9 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Great song beestie, I love the sound of the Morepork too, i listen to one outside our house at nights also.  Looking forward to having a go at this song smile

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2,046 Reply by Jandle

(6 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Well written beestie and sadly very true of some people.

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2,047 Reply by Jandle

(1 replies, posted in Songwriting)

I listened to it beestie, it came out great, whole new sound smile

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2,048 Reply by Jandle

(8 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Good song beestie, makes people think about stuff aye. smile

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2,049 Reply by Jandle

(3 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Welcome to Chordie Peatle, thanks for your kind words smile  Looking forward to seeing some of your songs up here too.  Peatle you are a great supporter and encourager to us all, appreciate it smile

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2,050 Reply by Jandle

(13 replies, posted in Songwriting)

Love this song of your Jim, perfect as is, says it all.  Looking forward to having a go at it myself smile

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