Agree with the general sentiment about copyright stated above. If you are not making money I don't think there is a lot of interest. But, if it's a hit song, and any part of it sounds like a riff from another song, its probably going to be challenged.

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Cool, glad it worked.

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Thank you Beamer - Thats a good shorter version

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I like this, It almost seems like it needs an extra verse starting "I'm almost drunk...  I'm almost crying ... If I said I'm OK, I'm almost lyin..."   But maybe not if this is a happy blues song lol.

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lol - I know kind of purposely vague in the first verse with the girl - Your mind can fill in the blanks.

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Good Johnny Cash feel

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I played it through and I like it.  Sad but real.

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That's an improvement on the chords, very cool!

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Phill - TIGLJK

Thanks I think you have really captured what that song is all about - with shared experience (driving into the sun) that is relatable.  I would do it as a slow country song but you are right that maybe different chords in the chorus will improve it. To be honest, I choose those chords in a couple minutes as a placeholder for possible better chords.  I am humbled by your comments.

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Thank you. If you have suggested changes, go ahead and post them here.  The song has not been recorded, and is just a draft at this point, so there are no bad suggestions.

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I'm trying to write a country song.  There is no recording of this yet. I'm looking for suggestions on better/different chord progression.  I like the feel of the drop downs to F at the end of each verse and chorus but I'm not crazy about the rest of the chords.

Thanks in advance for your feedback.

Drive into the Sun

[Am]At daybreak she [G]snuck out of that [C]West Texas bedroom, [Am]careful not to [G]wake the man or his [C]dog. [Am]She made herself the [G]last cup of his [C]coffee, [Am]then she crept out to her [G]old rusty [C]Dodge. [Am]When that old engine [G]started on the [C]third prayer, [Am]she spun the tires [G]out of that gravel [C]nowhere. [Am]An old life was [G]over and [C]new one had [F]begun..[G]and she drove into the [C]Sun.

Chorus:
[Am]Driving towards the [G]sun, the future ain’t too [C]clear. [Am]You just know what your [G]leaving in the [C]mirror.  [Am]You just hope that you're [G]going the right di[C]rection. [Am]And you just hope [G] God will help you [C]steer. You gotta [Am]grab that [G]wheel and hold on [C]tight. You gotta [Am]squint to see the [G]road signs of your [C]life. Your gonna [Am]know you made the [G]right turns when it [C]Just Feels [F]Right. [Am]You still have time to [G]chaaaange [C]but the time has [F]come….[G]to drive into the [C]Sun.


[Am]Just 21 but a [G]wife and baby needed a [C]paycheck, [Am]There was no work in [G]towns with chained-up [C]factory gates. [Am]He didn’t [G]know how to work an [C]oil rig, [Am]but heard strong backs [G]could get work in Western [C]states.  [Am]So he put a sleeping [G]bag in his [C]van, and [Am]told her about the [G]new towns in his [C]plans. [Am]She said find us a [G]new home [C]and we'll [F]come….[G]then he drove into the [C]Sun.

Chorus:

He had only known the Army all his life. The war had took his leg and took his wife. He didn’t know what he had left to give, he didn’t know if he had a reason to live. But he met a girl in College that October. She helped him with math and she helped him get over. The pain he thought would never go away. Then he realized that his day wasn’t done….and he drove into the Sun.

Chorus:

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Phill Williams wrote:

once again i have to apologize...sorry, i may have listened to other songs by some other artist?
i don't know why but it seems your song is no longer available, i hope you didn't take it down thinking i was being negative? i wasn't it is a very good song well performed. the other songs must have been on some kind of link so i thought they were you? in a totally different style i may add.
so when do we hear more of your music?

I have reposted a couple other artists and that may be what you heard.  If its listed under tracks, its something I uploaded. It's fun to just put a few things out there.  I wish I had time to write more original stuff.  I appreciate all the feedback. I have not removed anything and I don't think Soundcloud has removed it either.

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Phill Williams wrote:

I thought I'd already replied to this...oh well! Sorry bout that.

I like this very much, your voice suits it perfectly maybe cos I listened to it on my tablet, I didn't find the guitar overpowering. I thought I detected some Bon Jovi in there? Listened to your other tracks, all covers, did you put your voice over karaoke tracks? Very good sound, I hope you'll put up more of your own self penned songs.

Thanks. I don't know what you mean by karaoke tracks - its just me and one guitar. On some, effects like reverb were added. My voice isn't autotuned or anything. Nothing fancy.

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Posted a few more on Soundcloud that I had lying around the computer

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ctech wrote:

Great song deadeye good lyrics playing and voice if I had one negative thing to say it that the guitar drown out the voice a bit. But apart from that excellent.

You are right on, recorded with a phone and it was closer to the guitar than my face !  Thank you for the kind comments.

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Peatle Jville wrote:

Deadeye when I was younger drifting around from place to place your song reminded me of many a biker I met. Men on the run from relationship break ups.  Your chorus: is spot on. I enjoyed the way you did it on soundcloud.  Those words below of yours  bring back many a memory of Bikers I knew.
Girl I got nothing left to hold but the  throttle.
I got nothing left to kiss except the  bottle.
The open road sends an  invitation.
So I ride like hell with no  destination.

Thanks, I think a lot of bikers can relate.

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jets60 wrote:

Found it..like it too...https://soundcloud.com/user123641034/no … e-throttle

I bet others will as well! Great first song here, but you set your bar pretty high in my opinion.

 

Thank you for finding it and posting it and thanks for your kind comments.

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Really nice, I can hear the song as I read it.

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Sounds a lot like Springsteen - If I heard it on the radio I'd think it was him.

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Great story from beginning to end

First time posting - Did this a few years ago and sort of forgot about it.  Happy to hear any comments good or bad.

Wish I could post the SoundCloud link but I guess you need to post a lot more for that privilege.

Nothing Left to Hold but the Throttle


Verse 1

[Am] Another day in the saddle,

another [G] week on the road.

[D] Since you been gone girl,

[Am] this Harley's my home.

[Am] A few more miles and

Ill [G] crash for the night.

[D} Come next morning,

[Am] I'll roll back out of sight.

**Chorus:

Girl I got [D] nothing left to hold but the [Am] throttle.

I got [D] nothing left to kiss except the [Am] bottle.

[D] The open road sends an [C] invitation.

So I [E] ride like hell with no [Am] destination.

Verse 2

[Am] Another biker bar smells like

[G] sweat and whiskey.

So I [D] order another, ˇ

wonder [Am] if you miss me.

You think I'm hard to love and

my [G] hearts made of iron.

But [D] without you baby,

my [Am] engines dying.
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Chorus:
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Verse 3

[Am] Now I ride through the cold and

the [G] pouring rain,

through the [D] dust and the dirtˇbutˇIˇ

[Am] feel no pain,

until I close my eyes and

I [G] see your face,

and [D] remember your smile and

[Am] whisper   your name.
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Chorus:

ˇˇVerse 4

[Am] I got a full tank of gas and theˇ

[G] motors a pumpin.

the [D] winds in may face and the

[Am] pipes are a thumping.ˇ

Thisˇsteel horse and leather,

it [G] keeps me together.ˇ

but I [D] got to keep on rolling since

since I [Am] lost you forever.

ˇ

Chorus:

I can see my songbook in the drop down list but when I click it I get this message:

Private Songbook
You did try to access a songbook owned by somebody else.

If you got this link from somebody you know, please contact that person to ask if he/she can make this book public.

- It used to be Public. Don't know how to change it. Even if it was private, shouldn't it still let me see the songs?