hi Jim, running it through in my head felt like more of a soft rock rhythm similar to "is this love?" by either whitesnake or rainbow? just the rhythm not the melody line. i like it and when i get the chance i shall give it a go on the guitar.
just had a quick strum and i find it works perfectly, your frazing is reminiscent of the travelling wilburys so it's an automatic like from me.
i feel it might benefit from a bridge, maybe alter a verse to suit?